Picking pipers playings perceptively;
Running rampantly, ragingly...."Reality!"
Outside of oozing on operationality.
Denying debate, diffusing deceptives;
Sounds, sonnets, sollilloquoys..."Sanity!"
2007-12-21 09:44:38 · 14 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
"poem with a PROD"
2007-12-21 11:00:28 · update #1
Smiles...Perhaps it's true..."There is a pleasure in madness, only a madman can know."
I've been critisized more than once in my life for HOW I express, and usually, respectfully, let it roll off. I do have a couple suggestions however related most to how I express.
It seems we are limited here to quotation marks as opposed to Italics, which was one thing suggested to me.
Anyone who reads me for any length of time will probably notice such nuances as ,,, (multiple commas) OR CAPS.
What ways I express, especially in this most directed format, are merely for obvious (hopefully) Impact and garnering attention to a word or thought, through EMPHASIS.
Ok, putting my personal soap box away; I suggest this, and it's just my two cents.
We are all, (hopefully) aware of what quotation marks define.
In my case, and perhaps in this case, I might have used them for "operationality" since I kinda have a sense that it's a word you used not only "poetically" but not so familiar perhaps to others,,almost as if you'd MADE UP a new word.
I probably would have CAPITALIZED "Reality" and "Sanity", certainly words of Impact.
Beyond my diatribe, I find the piece, thought provoking and stimulating.
Keep at it, in any case.
Steven Wolf
2007-12-21 11:54:15 · answer #1 · answered by DIY Doc 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Well this is just about the strangest poem that I ever say. It is great but it could maybe be more effective if you added a line in between the lines you have now. You certainly have a way with words.
2007-12-21 09:59:35 · answer #2 · answered by wayne s 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
For random, quite a logical pass alongside with your theory. you certainly are beginning as much as test with unfastened verse and the standard is exhibiting. Sorry, yet had to snigger at "dawdle" considering that in this portion of the pond i could describe that word as archaic besides the fact that for the duration of all probability to no longer your section. Did you ever contemplate extending a word to enhance its effectiveness like L2S3: "silently," physique by potential of physique? a effective examine.
2016-11-04 05:53:43 · answer #3 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Loved your long rambling notes from early this AM. I had been up all night at hospital with one of my kids, so I wasn't really able to type a coherent answer at that time, but I really liked that and this one too. You're so lucky words flow from you so easily, your thoughts and you yourself explode from the page. I do like your work!!
2007-12-21 10:43:01 · answer #4 · answered by Chelle Mary 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It's a good exercise in alliteration. I like the last line best. TD
2007-12-21 10:28:42 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Awesome alot
see i can say words with the same beginning
2007-12-21 09:53:47 · answer #6 · answered by sammi a 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Alliteration to the extreme!
2007-12-21 09:47:26 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
kind of confusing. You should do a good love poem, they are really fun.
2007-12-21 09:59:37 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Sorry it sounds more like politics. Don't give up your day job!
2007-12-21 10:41:53 · answer #9 · answered by confussed sister 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I'm not sure it means anything and it's a bit of a tongue twister but it's interesting.
2007-12-21 09:49:26 · answer #10 · answered by Vega 3 · 1⤊ 1⤋