Please bear in mind that I was 11 when I wrote this!
March Wind
I feel the wind, I start to shiver
I know my walking pace is quicker
I start to run, the wind has begun
A last chilly breath of the winter.
Yet in the trees the young leaves quiver
Branches ripple, my feet are slower
I stop and see, in the chestnut tree
The magic of spring is now clearer.
The end!
2007-12-21 09:20:04 · 9 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
I like it! It's got the feel of a cycle (Walking, running, slowing, stopping)
It reminds me of "Stopping By Woods on a Snowy Evening"
2007-12-21 09:29:02 · answer #1 · answered by applesbononos 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hey!
It's cute. Definitely can tell it was written in the fledgling part of a writer's career, but it isn't bad. I like it.
Anyway, I hope you keep writing!
Luv ya,
Tashi :)
2007-12-21 23:51:38 · answer #2 · answered by LilLaTLuv 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it and it is a real good peom for a 11 year old good job
2007-12-21 17:29:41 · answer #3 · answered by Debbie T 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I liked it...
...the first stanza flowed a little more quickly..
...the second stanza concluded the poem well.
2007-12-21 17:32:12 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it is beautiful.
I cant wait until springtime!
2007-12-21 17:30:39 · answer #5 · answered by ymisitnhere 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
wow eleven!!
Great work :)
Do I see a bright future ahead of you?!~
2007-12-23 12:03:40 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Not bad at all!
2007-12-21 17:30:00 · answer #7 · answered by toymod 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very nice!!! Keep writing! :)
2007-12-21 17:36:19 · answer #8 · answered by Andigirl 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
kind of
2007-12-21 18:09:10 · answer #9 · answered by sammi a 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋