At my window
Watching the Sun go
Hopeing the stars know
It's time to shine
Daydreams
Alogf on dark wings
Soft as the sun streams
At days decline
Living is laughing
Dying says nothing at all
Baby and I lying here
Watching the evening fall
Time flows
Through brave beginnings
And she leaves here endings
Beneath our feet
Walk lighlty on their facees
Leave gengoe traces
Upon theie sleep
Living is dancing
Dying is doing nothing at all
Babe and I lying here
Watching the eveing fall
Three dimes
Hard luck and good times
Bad rhymes and fine lines
Ain't much to say
Feel fine
Feel low any lazy
Feel gray and hazy
Feel far away
Living is sighing
Dying ain't flying so high
babe and I wondering
Watching the day go by
2007-12-21 03:26:12 · 4 answers · asked by theefovalways 1 in Social Science ➔ Other - Social Science
barf!
2007-12-21 03:35:34 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's a good start, but I think you should revamp them a little bit. They might work well with music though. If the music is good, the lyrics can work as they are. Without music, I would suggest that you make a few changes. The words don't flow into the next phrase by themselves; but if you add music, the music can solve that problem.
2007-12-21 12:55:20 · answer #2 · answered by DANGEROUS WHEN THREATENED 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
the lyrics are nice but i would need to here the melody just to say it perfect. it really is a nice song and very moving but i need to hear the whole thing to be singing it around stuck in my head all day you know?
good job though
2007-12-21 11:33:22 · answer #3 · answered by full_of_repressed_memories 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
yes it is good
2007-12-21 12:16:29 · answer #4 · answered by Rana 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋