Everyday I think of us and our beautiful moments togather
and now you are gone
I am filled with a unspeakable sorrow
your memories come back to haunt me
your face is everywhere I go
I can still feel your kiss on my lips
my eyes fills with tears
wishing that you didn't hurt me
wishing that we'd try again
but no that won't work anymore
because we went our seperate ways
but do remember this I will still miss you even
if you did hurt me
so Good- Bye my love and I hope
that maybe one day we can
be togather again if it's in our
destiny
or maybe we'll both have the courage to go on...with our lives and never again remember each other's love....
2007-12-21 01:17:20 · 6 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Books & Authors
It's very touching & genuine. It brought me to a time when I felt like I was the only one who had ever felt that way.
2007-12-21 05:05:41 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think you can write like this:
The beautiful moments we had everyday
Departed away by our separate ways
Unspeakable sorrow that fills my thoughts
Shed the tears through my soring eyes
Your memories of the past that always haunt
Show your face in whatever I see
The pleausre of your kiss that my lips still feel
Is ever parted away without a way to heal?
I have no patience to change your song in the above model I wrote. You try.
2007-12-21 09:57:27 · answer #2 · answered by Raja 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Not bad at all, and as the previous person said, it is great to let your feelings out, and writing is a great way to do it. I am sorry you had to go through a hurtful situation, but remember this... sometimes you have to go through some pain to find true happiness. That is what my fiance said to me last night when we were talking about everything we have been through. Good Luck, and don't let one bad situation get you down. Happy Holidays!
2007-12-21 09:26:51 · answer #3 · answered by brandi91980 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think it;s a beautiful and heart felt poem ; and it shows how much pain it was to write It think your awfully strong to get it out and i applaud you for your courage..Your a great person' and i wish i had your poetry ability......Shelly
2007-12-21 09:52:03 · answer #4 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its good, its good that you are letting your emotions out too. It will reflect well upon your mental health.
2007-12-21 09:22:24 · answer #5 · answered by kagen_4 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
That was very good!!!
and im sorry it hurt you to write it.
2007-12-21 09:31:06 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋