Poem about my patriotism?

Question

If you say you're a Patriot, Act like one.
Questioning mine is an untruthful one.
An untruthful pursuit.
I'm related to George Washington, damnit!
I drink coffee like I'm a coffee bean bandit!
Is that not your cup of tea?
Is that why you f--- with me?

Truth is my truest mental addiction.
Truth is truly my affliction.
Do you dislike me;
because I bless the Sun like Egyptians?
The Sun...which one?
I shoot with words; you need a gun.
I write with heart and do it for fun.

I try to stay right and righteous.
News speaking nothing but hate; it incites it.
It invites it.
I seek to create peace and unity.
I seek to provide words, usefully.
They seek my stopping, usually.

I love my country's people, and yours.
Systems remove equals, creates whores.
Industrialism and business philosophies.
What can I say.....it's Ignorance obviously.


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originally posted, here:
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...to add a bit...

...am I a suspect?
quite an unusual one.
mixed nationality teenager
studying Truth like a major.
think I get a taste,
then it changes its flavor
where's an everlasting gobstopper?

American saying mixed nationality?
Yes, I know a bit of both families.
My father's side the Irish,
my mother's a crazy mix-bag.
But I'm not crazy.
Maybe, I'm lazy...
..in certain pursuits.
Maybe, if life were a game I'd played
I'd be a top recruit.
But, I'm not.
I don't believe in fighting as necessary

I dropped a name
but I'm not royalty...
not rich or chasing fame.
I love my people like Washington...
in a few ways we're the same.
Washington smoked chronic,
nowadays there's hydroponics
I carry oral tradition
in written electronics

A tradition of poetically formed history
the type that sheds light on mysteries.

My rhymes are for minds; mine's
following the Jeffersons
I move up like Dwight Howard,
I laugh if you call me a coward.

...are you saying George Washington wasn't capable of anger?
I wasn't comparing my state of mind with his. Sometimes I feel pushed enough, that I let my words push back a little.

Answer 1

I have a couple of comments here, and with no offense meant, I won't grade this piece.

"Truth" IS, or should be a "LAW" not a casual choice.

Steven Wolf

I too am a Patriot, as hopefully most are in their own countries, cultures, etc.; but I no longer wear it as a BADGE, so blatantly suggesting I may be the only one.

On a very practical note, and not knowing at all what gave birth to this piece, I for one, would not walk the streets of Iraq, wearing and American Flag, or any symbols denoting me a Christian...Unless of course I had a death wish.

That brings up one more notion, then I'll stop. Patriots are often UNsung, humble in their feelings unless pressed to a wall, and to DIE for an ideal seems less valid to me than LIVING for, and promoting one. Martyrdom is highly overrated.

Steven Wolf

Answer 2

Motherszone gives so many poems on patriotism, republic day in English. You can get the Hindi version of the poem which is translates in English so that it would be easier for the six year old children.Veer Tum Badhe Chlo is one of the best poem on patriotism.

Answer 3

Sounds more like anger, then patriotism. Being related to
George does not mean you are of his mind. four letter word
in a poem is without taste and lack of expression to feeling,
Try again with out so much anger, Where is gratitude for land
of freedom, Poem does not create peace.

Answer 4

You are very defensive in your poems this morning...OKAY!

What's wrong with blessing the Sun? Anhkaten was the Egyptian Pharoah who first worshipped one God...and he threw all the rest out. That one God was the Sun. He was the very first King of any land which had ever done so...become montheistic, with a following of tens of thousands.

Elysabeth Faslund...poemhunter

Answer 5

i'm sorry i dont like it at all. A poem is something sweet and sound good, not agressive words putted this way!

Answer 6

Hear here, Amen & Bravo.