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Question

Learning another language at a young age can be beneficial in a number of ways. For one thing, it is easier for children to learn to pronounce the words perfectly. As the child grows, their language skills improve almost effortlessly and they understand others around them and make better listeners. It is a good idea to take advantage of the fact that youth are quick to comprehend another language.
Learning a foreign language is difficult for people. They have to memorize sentence structures, use basic grammar to make sentences flow, and speak as well as native speakers. Young children, however, learn a language without too much stress. They speak to native speakers as words pop up in their heads and have better listening skills than adults. Hence, young students are more likely to succeed in mastering a language.

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Answer 1

"it is easier for children to learn to pronounce the words perfectly" --explain how or why this is so. They don't really pronounce them perfectly. Maybe you should say "to pronounce the words well."

"and make better listeners" should be "and become better listeners"

After "comprehend another language" it appears that you begin another paragraph, but you do not indent. Do you intend for this to be two paragraphs?

You should say: "Learning a foreign language is more difficult for older people."

Perhaps "as words pop up in their heads" would sound better as "as words pop into their heads."

Otherwise, grammatically speaking, there is nothing wrong with this paragraph.

Answer 2

Why? Is there something wrong with it? What exactly is the assignment?