I'm not sure how you would revise this sentence without making it to another sentece. The directions says to only to replace a phrase with a word, replace a clause with a phrase, or take out unnecessay worss. Help?
Since then, Perlman has appeared with every major orchestra, recorded most of the standard violin works, played on film soundtracks, and made jazz , ragtime, and comtemporary recordings of music that he has played.
[[I'm not 100% sure if this is acutally a run-on sentence, but I believe it is, since it is quite lengthy. I appreciate any help. :)]]
2007-12-18 15:17:35 · 20 answers · asked by L 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Words & Wordplay
No it's not a run on sentence...It's conveying four examples of (I'm guessing Itzhak) Perlman's accomplishments and not compounding too many concepts into one sentence. It's concise and to the point.
2007-12-18 15:23:37 · answer #1 · answered by Chanteuse_ar 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It wasnt a run on but it was lengthy. This is the best I could do to shorten the sentence. You shorten further by deleting the words I put in parentheses.
(Since then,) Perlman (has) appeared with (every) major orchestra(+s), played on (film) soundtracks, and recorded (most of the) standard violin works, jazz , ragtime, and comtemporary music, that he has played.
2007-12-18 15:38:25 · answer #2 · answered by teachervic 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It should read as follows: Perlman has recorded most of the standard violin works, played on film soundtracks, jazz, ragtime, comtemporary recordings of music and has appeared with every major orchestra.
2007-12-18 15:30:13 · answer #3 · answered by Gwynne K 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Perlman has appeared with every major orchestra, recorded most of the standard violin works, played on film soundtracks, made jazz , ragtime, and comtemporary recordings of music that he has played.
But your version is not a run on sentence
2007-12-18 15:29:27 · answer #4 · answered by top nurse 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Since then, Perlman has appeared with every major orchestra, recorded most of the standard violin works, played on film soundtracks, and made jazz, ragtime, and contemporary recordings of music that he played.
2007-12-18 15:21:50 · answer #5 · answered by mz.pianaplaya 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Perlman done good with the violin.
Perlman has since appeared with every major orchestra and has recorded standard violin works found in film soundtracks, jazz, and ragtime.
2007-12-18 15:25:55 · answer #6 · answered by unclewill67 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Since then, Perlman has appeared with every major orchestra, recorded standard violin works, played on film soundtracks, and has made comtemporary recordings of his music.
2007-12-18 15:21:30 · answer #7 · answered by itscaramel 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Since then, Perlman has appeared with every major orchestra, recorded most of the standard violin works, played on film soundtracks, and made recordings of his jazz, ragtime, and contemporary music.
This is what I would do.
:)
2007-12-18 15:23:37 · answer #8 · answered by Meg 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
No, that actually isn't a run-on sentence. A run on sentence is like two or three separate sentences without the period. This sentence has ONE subject - "Perlman" - ONE ACTION WORD - "has appeared" - and the rest is related to that subject and verb.
You think that's long? Read "Run On" by Donald Barthelme. Short story, TEN PAGES LONG...and only ONE SENTENCE!!!
2007-12-18 15:24:54 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It doesn't really look like a run-on sentence. Just becuase it's long, it doesn't mean it's a run-on.
It's pretty much listing things. You could use the ' ; ' to help make it better.
Sorry for not much help.
2007-12-18 15:23:11 · answer #10 · answered by panda2sweet 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋