Prose I wrote, what do you think?

Question

part one-

Remembering that dream, that had silenced the mind into believing it was but an amusing tale

However,

If these two lovers did happen to meet it would cause the cutest dilemma.

“To speak to you would be like biting a rose in half just to watch the petals fly away.”


part two-

With my indulgent disposition

It was only fair for you to leave

Your love for me was much stronger than I ever thoguht

You know I had been using another love

to pleasure myself

Yet you still doted upon me

Even if it meant you harming me at the same time


“You.” appearing in the most tempting of manners, would cause one to forgive herself when she needs to forget.

Answer 1

First of all, and with NO offense to others...THANK YOU, for not asking "How do YOU Like it?"

With some finesse, it's an impactful piece, quite personal,,,,even admitting and apologizing.

I haven't been here as long as my peers, but I say to you, Expressing ones passions should not strictly be judged for content or context.

I also include, given that this seems to be narrowly, personally directed, that you share it with the "OBJECT" person in question.

Steven Wolf

Answer 2

I really love the simile about biting the rose.. :)