are these good?
Skipping yellow through the day
Put down a hand and lay
Slipping and fall through the mist
Hear the splatter and a hiss
And listen while you dance
Trees fall at a glance
And children laugh to death
Forgetting their breath
Get up, but don’t
See and believe
The image is gone
It is going to thieve
Get up and go
Pictures that show
The life in your heart
Is right where we’ll start
But don’t forget
We had that bet
It’s in your hand
Looking out on this land
So get up, and stay
The beginning of May
And there is no clue
But just know I love you
2007-12-18 08:27:08 · 11 answers · asked by John G 1 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music ➔ Lyrics
I would change the word 'yellow' because it's too tempting for people to think the first lines have something to do with urinating. lol. Otherwise I think it's great and mysterious.
2007-12-18 08:33:16 · answer #1 · answered by the Boss 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i am a song wroter to try not to make every 2 lines ryhme , ur trying to express something in your life not ryhme if you know what i mean. it just ryhmes TOO much. its good but im thinking too much of the words than the point. and because of the ryhming, it is a lot harder to explain what your are trying to say to make the song have a TON of meaning =] i hoped i helped
2007-12-18 08:33:07 · answer #2 · answered by tyandcocoafastpitcher 1 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Wow that was great! If you have a good voice you should make a video of yourself singing it. And submit it on Myspace or Youtube! I give you 5 stars!
2007-12-18 08:32:32 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Oh WOw
I completely forgot i was reading song lyrcs, it just totally got me! I think their beautiful, really good consistant flow through it.
=D Great!
2007-12-18 08:33:49 · answer #4 · answered by . 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i am sittin' on the clouds, i got smoke coming from my seat.
i can play basketball with the moon i got the whole world at my feet.
playing touch football on marijuana street.
or in a marijuana field, you are so beneath my cleets.
get high. so high that i feel like frying.
down in a cigar roll me up and smoke me cause I FEEL LIKE DYING.
2007-12-18 08:29:32 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Okay, but rhymes 2 much!
2007-12-18 10:38:47 · answer #6 · answered by Nat 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow nice lyrics. i was thinking of writing lyrics of my own. but instead i right lil sayings and poems
2007-12-18 08:35:22 · answer #7 · answered by Patrick 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is kinda dark, and random but Im kinda dark and random! So I like it.
~So sick of being tired and oh so tired of being sick~
2007-12-18 08:34:59 · answer #8 · answered by Abbyyy 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think it's cute.
2007-12-18 08:30:26 · answer #9 · answered by Brittany Jones 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
kuyk
2007-12-18 08:29:03 · answer #10 · answered by Allie G 1 · 0⤊ 2⤋