Do you like this poem my husband wrote right after we found out I was pregnant with our first love~child?

Question

The two bodies entwine
each with it's own shine.
mixing and meshing to create
that intricate design of their mate.

writhing to a unique beat,
gyrating bodies attempt to meet,
making eachother grow
with their rythmic flow

then with an impatient blast
they become a single mass
which will last only a moment
before it falls dorment.

to everywhere it flies
before it recedes and dies
and in its thoes of death
blows life's beautiful breath.

just so everybody knows, he actually did have correct grammar and spelling, i was just in a big hurry when i typed it out:-)
and
we have 2 kids now

Answer 1

Yes indeed, it is beautiful. It's about a zygote during that quiet moment when life begins without our knowledge. It is when the mysterious elements are "mixing and meshing to create
that intricate design of their mate."

It is when the panting souls are
"writhing to a unique beat,
gyrating bodies attempt to meet,
making each other grow
with their rythmic flow"

Then, the " impatient blast" conjoins into a "single mass" lasts only a moment before the quietness resumes.
Your hubby surely knows about these mysteries.

Spell "rhythmic "flow properly.

Good luck to the three of you all.

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Answer 2

Meh- I've read better.