I chose to see you,
Lied to myself,
Let you hurt me so badly,
Now still alone, deprived...
You pushed my limits,
And yet still in power,
fake grin when you wink
numbs my pain, my tears.
You have this charm,
Though you look like a beast,
irresistible look,
which blinds me utterly.
Thank God my heart cannot be fooled,
too pure to ignore the truth,
disgraceful manner,
deceitful nature...
2007-12-12 23:33:08 · 12 answers · asked by ladybird 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
Guys I am not a poet...not even trying to be one. I just scribbled sth down within literally 3 minutes....I felt like this. Just asking your personal opinions.
2007-12-12 23:42:57 · update #1
It strikes me right to the core. I feel I have been in that place. It is genuine, honest, heartfelt and direct. You have found your authentic voice. This is what poetry is all about. Thank you for sharing it.
2007-12-13 06:41:34 · answer #1 · answered by Michael S 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Drivel. Sorry but that's the honest truth. Sorry.
2007-12-13 07:36:09 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
i think its very interesting and that you express your emotions on paper extremly well, which is not always easy. maybe you should think about poetry...it doesnt have to rhyme you know. :)
2007-12-13 12:30:26 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think I know what you've been through. Ouch. Run.
2007-12-13 07:39:04 · answer #4 · answered by Zeera 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
so so. a little more improvement with the unity of thought and the connection of words.:)
2007-12-13 07:37:56 · answer #5 · answered by Concerned.. 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
Think you need a holiday.
2007-12-13 15:06:02 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
that is really good are u planing on giving it to someone
2007-12-13 07:41:07 · answer #7 · answered by shiva 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
If you wrote it it's very good.
2007-12-13 07:35:32 · answer #8 · answered by elizadushku 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
if it means something to you then it is important.
as a poem, i am not qualified to comment.
2007-12-13 07:37:10 · answer #9 · answered by L 7 · 0⤊ 1⤋
touching and deep
2007-12-14 06:23:06 · answer #10 · answered by Ivory33 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋