You capture my heart
When I just hear you laugh
And though we are young
You're my missing half
When you're playing with children
And showing them love
You make my heart beat
Like your sent from above
You capture my heart
With your captivating beauty
And inspire me to make
Caring for you my duty
When you're walking, you move
With such style and grace
And I could study all day
Every line of your face
I'll search high and low
Until each other we find
But now for today
You exist in my mind
I'll learn your inner beauty
On the net when we chat
And know as you type
That my heart's where you're at
When we are apart
It's you I will miss
And long once again
To taste your sweet kiss
I'll embrace you so close
Each night and each day
But for now I will search
Till I find you .................Someday
(I would love to correspond and get feedback on this)
2007-12-11 00:24:40 · 10 answers · asked by dwsum41@yahoo.com 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
ahh! That's so sweet, I love it! Do you care if I write it down, it's soo sweet!♥♥♥
2007-12-11 00:32:43 · answer #1 · answered by ♥ElizabethAnne♥ 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
When we are apart
It's you I will miss
And long once again
To taste your sweet kiss
I'll embrace you so close
Each night and each day
But for now I will search
Till I find you .................Someday
*clapclapclap* very beautiful and well said, im writing poems myself but i never got anything close to this masterpiece. Good job!
2007-12-11 08:35:31 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's very sweet and not to long as the guys would have you think, after all, you are writing it for a woman right? I like, don't change it.
2007-12-11 08:34:54 · answer #3 · answered by Blu 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very nice. I would leave it just the way it is. I hope you have someone special to give it to.
2007-12-11 08:33:40 · answer #4 · answered by LIPPIE 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
A bit long, try and shorten it by about half.
2007-12-11 08:27:15 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
That is really sweet. Keep it as it is, don't change anything about it.
2007-12-11 08:29:09 · answer #6 · answered by monica 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Really good poem, I think you should send it to the one you really wrote it for.
2007-12-11 08:39:05 · answer #7 · answered by paige_laine 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
awwwwwwwwwwwww i wish someone would write nice things to me!
2007-12-11 08:28:32 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Too long.
2007-12-11 08:30:08 · answer #9 · answered by murlow12 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow,, thats good
2007-12-11 08:30:44 · answer #10 · answered by Dark Cleric 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋