I keep thinking of you,
but I can't say I don't want to,
I don't know what to do,
I thought i wanted to see you,
but when i did my heart almost died,
I tried not to but when I got home,
I dropped to my knees and cried,
I wanted to stay for a little bit,
but I didn't because I knew,
today I would be regretting it,
I didn't mean to cause any trouble,
but when I tried to fix it,
I got in double,
I didn't mean to embarise you,
i'm sorry I freaked you out too,
without you I don't feel alone,
but I really want to talk to you,
atleast on the phone,
I'm still greatful for all we had,
but when I think about it,
it makes me sad,
I'm happy I met you,
and have these memories,
I'm happy that I loved you,
but i'd be even happier,
if you loved me too.
2007-12-07 11:24:51 · 14 answers · asked by bisexualgirl 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
You could probably get it published if you paid to have it published.
2007-12-07 11:29:00 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
First a thank you to get a e book printed. There are 2 techniques - by a writer or a private self-publishing press. a private self-publishing press is fantastic notwithstanding if that's barely to placed up a e book for your self or your pals and kin. that's amazingly costly and you will in all probability by no ability be chanced on as a author. any different way is to placed up your artwork to a commercial writer (i.e. Random residing house) and have them placed up and marketplace your artwork. the earnings of that's which you will improve into widely used and you gets a commission for writing. Now this little bit of advice is important to comprehend. all the Harry Potter characters and subjects are copyrighted and could no longer be used. at present a e book place in England tried to throw a Harry Potter themed Halloween dinner social gathering and that they have been given into complication for copyright violations. So in the past you get too a ways into your tale you extra powerful think of approximately changing the names and likewise the places so as which you don't get right into a pickle.
2016-10-01 02:48:16 · answer #2 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It sounds more like a diary entry to me, but hey, don't give up! You might want to try writing something that doesn't rhyme. Rhyming makes a poem appear juvenile, unless done extremely well. Keep trying, though.
2007-12-07 11:31:35 · answer #3 · answered by xandrels 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
umm its just a poem..not a book
and if you want to write a book...as do i
you have to get through high school and take extra writing classes
like
-pre-ap english
-creative writing
stuff like that
it was a beautiful poem but you also should work on writing a story(book mayb eventually) and work on it through out high school because most likely you wont be able to even get a book published tell after your 18 anyway
2007-12-07 11:30:26 · answer #4 · answered by Adri 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
not bad. but if you want your work to be published you better start working a bit harder on those lines. seriously, a poem can be anything but a nice one should have all lines equal of length and stuff. but its not bad.
2007-12-07 11:29:51 · answer #5 · answered by icriedherariver 5 · 0⤊ 1⤋
well i read the first couple of lines and no i dont think so. it doesn't flow and i had trouble reading it. maybe when your older, in hs english you take a great unit on poems.
2007-12-07 11:29:06 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
needs editing but thumbs up =D
2007-12-07 11:28:55 · answer #7 · answered by blah_blah2628 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
it's a really nice poem, but sorry it wasn't "WHOAH!!!!!" for me but I'd give you an A or an honorable mention :)
2007-12-07 11:29:22 · answer #8 · answered by full_of_repressed_memories 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋
eh
2007-12-07 11:27:52 · answer #9 · answered by S i r i 1 · 1⤊ 0⤋
thats pretty good, good for you! And answering your question yes you can = )
2007-12-07 11:28:28 · answer #10 · answered by spring 6 · 0⤊ 1⤋