My friend wrote this poem based soley on the idea. His disclaimer to me was this " lance watson: Raquel, i am not and have never been a cutter, or suicidal". So with that said....What is your opinion of his work....please be kind...as poetry is his pastime and not profession. I do believe he did an amazing job, but I am biased, please share your insight;~D
My Scars
I feel trapped inside of my own mind,
my deep emotions,
i can't unwind.
One moment euphoric,
chasing my dream,
next minute depressed,
with no self esteem.
My only freedom,
is to cause myself pain,
a blade and the blood,
i'm cutting again.
As my blood drips dark red,
off the blade and my arm,
i'm at peace,
i'm tranquil, i'm calm.
To me it's relief,
a release,
just like rain,
it replenishes, renews,
and i'm growing again.
The scars that i have,
i keep hidden from view,
for my eyes only,
never for you,
And each and every one,
has a tale it would tell,
just thank God,
your not like me,
and living my hell.
Lance Watson 3/12/07
2007-12-04 08:04:08 · 12 answers · asked by ? 2 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
i thank each and every one of you for you lovely comments, on my poem, and as i said i am not and never have been a cutter, or suicidal. Your comments are very much appreciated and Raquel should be congratulated for giving me the courage to explore my emotions and more importantly the courage to share, thankyou. xoxoxx
Lance Watson
2007-12-07 16:49:38 · answer #1 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Pretty good. If he was going for emotional intensity, he hit himself a grand slam. If he's telling the truth about never being a cutter, etc., then he's done a really good job of getting inside someone else's head.
Is he a friend of yours? If he is, and he's got a decent sized volume of work, I would encourage him to try to get published.
I wish him luck.
2007-12-05 13:39:51 · answer #2 · answered by Yinzer Power 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
This is very close to my own writing , I even have a poem called scars. They are alike in that they are dark and I like this very much. Tell your friend to keep up the good work.
2007-12-04 08:16:44 · answer #3 · answered by The Dark Prince 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Self inflicted scars are usually done in a pattern and are normally all the same size. If you have never cut just say it, explain how you got them, and leave it in the past.
2016-04-07 08:32:27 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I do thank God I'm not like that.
I wish your friend would find an easier way to happiness, than by following in the footsteps of pain.
At least it gets him past the rain.
Good poem. Painfully touching.
2007-12-04 08:11:58 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 3⤊ 0⤋
I like that! I used to cut many years ago and it sums up how I felt at the time. itoo used to write poems but would not have the nerve to post on the web. Well done!
2007-12-04 08:22:06 · answer #6 · answered by Witch 4 · 4⤊ 0⤋
although i never tell u things like this raq i could have written those same words without the cutting my scars are in my head but that all said he's done a fantastic job
2007-12-04 10:20:55 · answer #7 · answered by John S 5 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Wow that's a really good poem. Very excellent....he should go professional! lol. But seriously, that's an amazing poem
2007-12-04 08:17:40 · answer #8 · answered by Nikita ♫ 4 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Its a very vivid and well constructed poem. But it is a sad realization that there really is a lot of sadness that we cause each other and ourselves.
2007-12-05 14:53:58 · answer #9 · answered by david h 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
TRUE LOVE IS THE ANSWER
if you find that then you never need to consider a negative moment in your life again. (i have, and im so lucky, keep searching everyone i hope you find it too)
2007-12-04 08:53:45 · answer #10 · answered by Chewyconor 5 · 1⤊ 0⤋