.....Star Journeys: Vivace
It came down, in the end, to starlight...
Dusted lashes blinking,
Eyes trailing intricate arms of galaxies,
Thinking with breaths of blood,
Eons of blood...
One second...one life.
Wait for me,
I will meet you at the edge of dawn.
It came down, in the end, to starlight...
Raised hands translucent,
Nails embedding tenuous holds
As universes streamed past...
The footprints...
One song...one time.
Talk to me,
I will tell you of the edge of dawn.
It came down, in the end, to starlight...
Etching flame-aura shadows
Around ancestors, scarred and sleek...
For laws bound to the
Beginning...the end.
Walk with me,
We go to the edge of dawn.
And there, sit with our kind, the home
We always sought...
Beyond the speed of sight...
In our hands the while...
There to greet us at the Door
Forever open...starlight.
Elysabeth Faslund...Poemhunter.com
2007-12-04 01:34:28 · 10 answers · asked by Elysabeth 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
This is wonderful, the imagery is so compelling I read it over and over. I love the contrast of the brevity of life and the timelessness of starlight- my favorite part is
For laws bound to the
Beginning...the end
There is a tremendous philosophy in those words that I love. I could go on and on .I feel the poem itself is flawless. I love it
2007-12-04 02:03:28 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
You need to figure out what the main points of the story are and apply more time to those. Add more details where you think details should be added for instance (He heard foot steps from the hall way getting closer followed by the sound of his bedroom doorknob being slowly turned and knew that as soon as the door opened his father would know he didn’t get into Lakefield University and would feel the same disappointment in him that he felt in himself) Can use different adjectives (Noah stared at him with a blank expression, worried about what he was about to find out “You lied about what?” He asked nervously.) instead of blank expression you could say worried expression which compliments the line (he asked nervously)) And on top of that add bigger and more articulate words that have stronger definitions.
2016-04-07 07:43:57 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is beautiful. I love the way it came down...
I hope to sit in the home with our kind, some day
2007-12-05 07:11:34 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋
Sure. Know what else is good? The song "Starllight" by Muse.
2007-12-04 01:36:37 · answer #4 · answered by Elephant 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yeah. I always have noticed the stars.
2007-12-04 01:37:15 · answer #5 · answered by CaLeR 2 · 1⤊ 1⤋
wow
2007-12-04 01:36:21 · answer #6 · answered by Ponteeee 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Great poem. Thanks for sharing!
2007-12-04 01:38:04 · answer #7 · answered by Lisa2000 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
o.O
2007-12-04 01:37:17 · answer #8 · answered by Matt D 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
muse? no..
2007-12-04 01:36:56 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 2⤋
?
2007-12-04 01:36:44 · answer #10 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 1⤋