Pls check for my grammar and spelling pls pls pls....?

Question

*Market research*
What is available on the market?

After a detailed research from magazines, internet and by visiting the variety stores. I can see there has different kind of home entertainment control organizer which come from different shapes and made by a variety kind of materials. Wood, metal and fabric are commonly used in the product. However there has no organizer with a table top design on the market.

*Final evaluation of the project*

Overall, I'm very satisfied with the way my work has turned out. In designing and making this organizer, I believe that I worked well with my teammates.
The organizer is very functional, it has a small table, pocket that can store the controllers and a base that fits magazines or newspapers. The design is simple and the materials are very economical. I think that this design for a home entertainment control organizer is very unique as I never seen this design in the market. I'm extremely happy with this outcome.

Answer 1

are we only checking whats written below the "final evaluation" area? if so, here:


Overall, I am very satisfied with the way my work has turned out. While designing and making this organizer, I believe that I have worked well with my teammates.
The organizer is completely functional. It has a small table, a pocket that can store the controllers, and a base that fits magazines and/or newspapers. The design is simple and the materials are very economical. I think that this design for a home entertainment control organizer is very unique since I have never seen it on the market. I am extremely happy with this outcome.

**you must remember that when writing english papers...try never to use contractions such as "don't, i'm, can't etc". instead, write out the entire meaning: "do not, i am, can not". otherwise, it's well written..just a few minor changes. =)

Answer 2

I moved “the Internet” to the first of the series. Changed a few things throughout. When writing a research – or any other paper – do not use contractions – such as “I’m, can’t, don’t, etc.” Good luck!

*Market research*
What is available on the market?

After a detailed research from the Internet, magazines and by visiting the variety stores, I can see there are different kinds of home entertainment control organizers which come from different shapes and are made by a variety of materials. Wood, metal and fabric are commonly used in the product; however, the market currently has no organizer with a table top design.

*Final evaluation of the project*

Overall, I am very satisfied with the way my work has turned out. I believe that I worked well with my teammates in designing and making this organizer. The organizer is very functional, it has a small table, a pocket that can store the controllers and a base that fits magazines or newspapers. The design is simple and the materials are very economical. I think that this design for a home entertainment control organizer is very unique as I never seen this design in the market. I am extremely happy with this outcome.

Answer 3

After a detailed research from magazines, internet, and by visiting the variety stores. I can tell there are different kinds of home-entertainment control organizers which are in different shapes, and made from a variety of materials. Commonly used in the product include wood, metal, and fabric. However, there is no organizer with a table top design on the market.

*Final evaluation of the project*

Overall, I'm very satisfied with the way my work has turned out. I believe that I worked well with my teammates in designing and making this organizer.
The organizer is very functional, it has a small table and a pocket that can store the controllers, and a base that fits magazines or newspapers. The design is simple, and the materials are very economical. I think that this design for a home entertainment control organizer is very unique as I have never seen this design in the market. I'm extremely happy with this outcome.

Answer 4

*Market research*
What is available on the market?

After detailed research from reading magazines, Internet web pages, and through visiting variety stores, I can see that there are different kinds of home entertainment control organizers which are made in different shapes and a variety of materials. Wood, metal and fabric are commonly used to create this product. However, there is no organizer with a table top design on the market.

*Final evaluation of the project*

Overall, I am very satisfied with the way my work has turned out. In designing and making this organizer, I believe that I worked well with my teammates.
The organizer is very functional, it has a small table pocket that can store the controllers and a base that fits magazines or newspapers. The design is simple and the materials are very economical. I think that this design for a home entertainment control organizer is very unique as I never seen this design in the market. I am extremely happy with this outcome.

Answer 5

just doing this because yahoo can check spelling...
Nope, all you misspelled was the capitol I in Internet

Market research*
What is available on the market?

After a detailed research from magazines, Internet and by visiting the variety stores. I can see there has different kind of home entertainment control organizer which come from different shapes and made by a variety kind of materials. Wood, metal and fabric are commonly used in the product. However there has no organizer with a table top design on the market.

*Final evaluation of the project*

Overall, I'm very satisfied with the way my work has turned out. In designing and making this organizer, I believe that I worked well with my teammates.
The organizer is very functional, it has a small table, pocket that can store the controllers and a base that fits magazines or newspapers. The design is simple and the materials are very economical. I think that this design for a home entertainment control organizer is very unique as I never seen this design in the market. I'm extremely happy with this outcome.

Answer 6

REVISED

After a detailed research from magazines, Internet and by visiting stores, I found that home entertainment control organisers come in many shapes and sizes. The entertainment control organisers also vary in the materials used, such as wood, metal, and fabric.

Overall, I'm very satisfied with the way my work has turned out. In designing and making an organiser, I believe that i worked well with my teammates. The organiser is very functional and this is portrayed through the small table, pocket suitable for controllers/remotes, and base for magazines or newspapers. The organiser has a simple design with very earth-friendly materials.I think that this design for a home entertainment control organiser is very unique as i have never seen this design on the market. I'm extremely happy with the outcome of the project.





VERY GOOD JOB. HOWEVER I FELT THE PAPER LACKED SENTENCE FLUENCY AND WORD CHOICE. I THINK I MADE SOME PRETTY GOOD CHANGES.

REMEMBER, YOU DONT HAVE TO TAKE MY SUGGESTIONS BECAUSE THEY ARE JUST SUGGESTIONS.

Answer 7

1. in the beginning, I would suggest putting in the internet instead of just internet, it flows better. and you put a period after I, you shouldn't have one there.
2. for the second sentence, this is the a good way of restating it: It is apparent after my research that there are various types of home entertainment organizers available, made of a variety of materials, with all different shapes and sizes.
3. when you say however, there has no, instead put however, there is no
4. in the first sentence of the last paragraph, put AND before I believe.
5. the organizer is functional, with a small table and pocket that is able to store the controllers and a base ......
6. you are missing a HAVE; when u say ..is very unique as I HAVE never seen...
Hope this helped. could you possibly vote me as best answer if I helped a great amount? thanks.

Answer 8

I've made some changes. Note that where I changed punctuation I made a note in brackets for you.

After detailed research from magazines, the internet and by my visiting variety stores, [comma instead of period] I learned that there are different kinds of home entertainment control organizers in different shapes, [comma inserted] and which are made from a variety of materials. Wood, metal and fabric are commonly used; [semicolon instead of period] however, [comma insterted] there was no organizer with a table top design on the market.

Answer 9

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Answer 10

Just say, "After detailed research." Don't add "a."

"Internet" is capitalized. And it should be prefaced by the word "the." Don't say "the variety stores." Simply "variety stores" sounds better. There should be a comma after "stores," not a period.

Also, I think you mean "THEY HAVE different kinds of home entertainment control ORGANIZERS THAT come IN different shapes and ARE made WITH a variety of different materials." (The words I changed are capitalized.)

"That" prefaces a restrictive clause. "Which" prefaces a nonrestrictive clause. For example, in the sentence "the cat that is on the table," THAT IS ON THE TABLE is a a restrictive clause; it restricts the meaning of the subject. If there's no comma before the word "which," it probably needs to be changed to the word "that."

It should be, "However, there ARE no ORGANIZERS with a table top design on the market.

There should be a period after "functional." Start a new sentence. Put the word "a" before "pocket."

"Very unique" is unnecessary. Unique means "one of a kind, unlike anything else." Just say "unique."

It should be "I HAVE never seen this design on the market."

A general suggestion: don't overuse the word "very." It weakens your point.


Hope that helps.

One thing that helps me to write clearly and well is reading what I write aloud. If it makes sense read aloud and sounds right, it probably is. Often you can catch basic errors that way.