Crash!
Written by Semper Fi Reborn
She gets my motor running early.
My fluids have been checked.
I had a tuneup,
My tires have be realigned.
I have a full tank.
She starts me up and,
Takes me for a spin through the countryside.
My odometer is reaching speeds,
That cause me to shake.
Still she hits the gas,
My engine roars.
She's been driving me for years.
We never crash.
Man, oh man, I love her so.
2007-11-29 11:31:16 · 12 answers · asked by Semp-listic! 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
It was extremely plain, and unutterably forgettable.
I realized instantly, almost midway through it was about your wife. That is never good. There should be more of a mystery.
Your ODOMETER wouldn't reach speeds, it would just count the miles you've traveled. The SPEEDOMETER would, however.
When was the last time you even read good poetry? Must have been a real long time ago.
See: Ginsberg
2007-11-29 11:44:51 · answer #1 · answered by Chara Pointshot 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Ahhhh, how sweet. You need to go back and change be to been for tires, and change odometer to speedometer and you ready to run. What a nice tribute to the one you love. I'm sure she will love it. I wished more men would take the time to make the effort. She's a very lucky lady.
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Just another one of those comparing cars to women poems to me. Seen them all! Try something new buddy!
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #3 · answered by U Have Nothing Better 2 Do 3 · 3⤊ 0⤋
I kind of like this poem. It could use some "tune-up" but I think overall it's pretty good.
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Now that's true love! Great poem! Really.
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
make it more about a human not a car i see what youre trying to say but make it about her appearence and how shes is emotionally
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
its not something i would want my bf to say to me im sorry its like ur in love with ur car more than her its not something i would read
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
what a lucky lady
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #8 · answered by ? 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
no offense,
but i dont like it
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Schweet! :-)
2007-12-01 03:42:32 · answer #10 · answered by Яɑɩɳɓɵw 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋