I can't check my own paper because I think that jsut because I wrote it it's corect; which is never the case. Any feed back or comments, things I should change would be great. Thanks for your help!
In the past twenty-three years, I have written forty-seven novels, won numerous awards and have been handed fame beyond belief for a writer; yet I am not happy. My life has no significance. I have written forty-seven novels that mean absolutely nothing to me. How do I write of horrors I have not feared? How do I write of a love that is not my own? Today is the day that I will bring significance into my life; today is the day that I become a writer.
This novel, as all my others, is dedicated to Kateline. You were my first and my last love. With out you this story, out story would be impossible.
2007-11-29 04:05:13 · 3 answers · asked by inlovewithlizaminnelli 3 in Education & Reference ➔ Homework Help
I would say "Over the past twenty-three years" rather than "In the past..." I seem to recall that you write out small numbers, but use the number for 23 and 47, etc. I don't know if that's correct, but it's in my head. I would also make it more paragraphs for dramatic effect. Watch out for the semi-colons. Although you used them correctly, they should be used judiciously. I would avoid them because they seem pretentious. I changed some punctuation, and changed out to our in the last paragraph. Just my thoughts...don't know if they're correct or not.
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Over the past twenty-three years, I have written forty-seven novels, won numerous awards and have been handed fame beyond belief for a writer.
Yet I am not happy.
My life has no significance. I have written forty-seven novels that mean absolutely nothing to me. How do I write of horrors I have not feared? How do I write of a love that is not my own?
Today is the day that I will bring significance into my life.
Today is the day that I become a writer.
This novel, as all my others, is dedicated to Kateline. You were my first and my last love. With out you, this story, our story, would be impossible
2007-11-29 04:46:16 · answer #1 · answered by Debdeb 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
In the past twenty-three years, I have written forty-seven novels, won numerous awards and have been handed fame beyond belief for a writer; yet I am not happy. My life has no significance. I have written forty-seven novels that mean absolutely nothing to me. How do I write of horrors I have not feared? How do I write of a love that is not my own? Today is the day that I will bring significance into my life; today is the day that I become a writer.
This novel, like all my others, is dedicated to Kateline. You were my first and my last love. With out you,this story would have been impossible.
2007-11-29 12:10:36 · answer #2 · answered by ☆☃❀ ~♥~♪ tigger bitten ♪~♥~ ❀☃☆ 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
edit your own paper
2007-12-03 12:54:01 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋