Do you like this verse with alliteration and rhyme?

Question

Sunflower follows the warmth of you, glowing,
Summertime vibrant alive colors flowing,
Sandy soft grass mounds, willow tree bowing,

Picnic place perched under shady persimmon,
Plates all arranged, and manors forgiven,
Peace, perhaps passion, appetite driven,

Laughter for lunch under crystalline sky,
Lazy lament of our chances past by,
Long ago lovers, under prairie grass lie…

Answer 1

I'm always crazy bout alliteration and rhymes...same here i just learnt what persimmon means! =)
--->i just checked in the etymology dictionary, the Japanese also call it "kaki" too...

Answer 2

I indeed like it, and recognize the same mood as before. Beautiful last stanza.

I have learned a new word, persimmon. In French, it is called a "kaki".