The evening sun it sets,, do you feel the heat,
on the beach together, where our bodies meet.
glistening in the dusk, naked bodies dance as one,
to the music made by nature, for pleasure and for fun.
Your supple breasts they shine, seeking some ultimate pleasure,
slowly the lips will fall to meet your forbidden treasure,,
feel the strength in arms that tightly wrap around
and the merging of bodies the exciting feel and sound.
kisses into the night,, ecstacy that feels just right..
The excitement,,,,,,,,,,, of the merge.... comments welcomed, the content of poem not nearly as exciting as the "feel" of the poem. tommy_caswell2000@yahoo.com smile!! :)
2007-11-28 04:23:46 · 3 answers · asked by tommy C 1 in Family & Relationships ➔ Singles & Dating
You got the start of a nice poem, but you need an ending stanza for it like:
we were in the middle of wild and frenzied lust
when a cop said "shove off, the beach was closed at dusk"!
or:
She gave out a hearty laugh when she gazed at my erection
She said that it's so small, it almost escapes detection!
2007-11-28 04:42:58 · answer #1 · answered by Flying Dragon 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
That's hott! I absolutely love it! Reminds me of the olden time poems when they talked about stuff like that, except I was able to understand it!
2007-11-28 12:27:38 · answer #2 · answered by Briana 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
haha.. the feel of the poem.. good. lol. great work, very artful!
2007-11-28 17:11:15 · answer #3 · answered by dragonflyy 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋