hows this poem i wrote...?

Question

a little emotional i know but here....


watch me as i burn.
ashes in your dreams.
sleep, tortured by night.
dark, haunting my soul.
devouring, waiting, destroying.
head rises up.
gasping for air.
closing my eyes.
squeezing tight.
reget, reverse, return.
closely following.
beautiful boy.
dark hair, hidden smile, trapped anger.
falling, falling, gone.
strengthining love.
mysterious fury.
get out, leave, escape.
single soul, keeps me here.
time defeats love.
relax, revise, redo.
into the stars.
my body dissapears.
goodbye, gone, forever.

<3

good?

Answer 1

I like it and the reason is because I'm crazy like you about writing.Is different but has a lot on deepness into the meaning. Good work.