I had an amazing dream that was haunting and beautiful and I wrote some prose and would like comments?

Question

It is a little too long to post here so here is the link to the short piece of writing:

http://meanderingtrevor.blogspot.com/search?q=ramshackle+beach+shack

Answer 1

Thanks Trevor. That was beautiful and mystical. Great piece of writing.

Of course, I assume the old man was a part of you, that part that is a bit disconnected from your conscious self--a somewhat sad, pensive, longing, wondering part that many of us have.

Perhaps you are a little disconnected to your soul? For me that connection comes and goes and seems difficult to maintain, no matter how I try.

Great imagery, interesting story, haunting. Damn, I wish I had dreams like that! (BTW, you might want to change "feint" to "faint," but that's very minor.)

I would like to read more! You are very talented.

Answer 2

Okay, I think I got it.............
The deserted, beautiful beach is your inner peace with your ultimate decision to be true to yourself and be who you are now. That is a truly wonderful thing, as it is very hard for the rest of us to find.
It is also a place you wish you could be more often in your busy life, a place where you find peace and tranquility to balance the crazy pace of city life.
The disconnection means you feel you are not yet "whole" with the people around you. You still have to connect to people who are not like you or don't agree with you. You are searching for your soul mate, but unable to find someone who is so much like yourself, because ultimately your soul mate is someone you hope is almost exactly like yourself. But since that person, a person almost exactly like you, does not exist, you feel that loss. And you don't want second best or 3rd runner up, you want yourself reflected in another person.
The phone represents your inefficient attempts to find solid, trustworthy relationships in your life. (Sorry, but I do know that it is very, very difficult for people of alternative lifestyles to connect with someone they can truly trust.) You yourself are comfortable with your life and personal lifestyle, hence the feelings you had on the beach, but at the same time you know what a lonely life alternative lifestyles can be. That is represented by the ghost town and the party. The ghost town is your ambiguity towards both London and San Francisco, both good places to find someone who shares your point of view, but at the same time you feel shut out because you are ______. You feel you still can't go to certain places, or can't join the party because you are _____. And perhaps you once upon a time had a very good friend who dropped you because they found out you were _______. (That's the broken phone line, your unfruitful attempts to call former good friends, and your ultimate feeling of being shut out.)
The dream as a whole means you want a resolution between your 2 worlds - your alternative lifestyle and full acceptance from friends and family of your lifestyle. And you are finding that in reality there is still so much dividing the 2, and you keenly feel the loss of those who cannot accept you because you are _____.
The only advice I can give you is that God loves you for who you are inside, God knows what is in your heart, and you feel it inside as you walk on that beautiful beach island of peace. Congratulations, so many of us never find that inner peace. Accept God's love for what it is, and try to pass on that love and acceptance of those around you, even those who do not measure up to your personal standards. It's easy to love those who are lovable, it's hard to forgive and accept those who don't love you back. As you accept and learn to love those around you for who they are as you accept yourself for who they are, you may feel more fully included at the next party. True benevolence and love are so hard to pass on to others, but if you can, you may find that true love you so desire.
Good luck.

Answer 3

Wow. Awesome. Thanks for the 10 points in advance!