Tell me if this is any good. I dont think it is cause I'm bad at writting essays.?

Question

its about what it would be like to wake up to find your in a movie stars body. thanks and here it is-

“Pick up the pace” demanded my boss, Mr. Henderson, as I carried a tray a foods to table seven. I work at McDonalds, it’s not the most glamorous place to work but I need the money. I have to work so many jobs, I don’t really have the best clothes, and I always feel invisible because nobody really notices me. When my shift was over I was relieved that after a hard day of work I could take a long nap. Although I didn’t expect to wake up in a movie stars body.

I awoke in a giant water bed. I looked around me to find out that I was in a gaint room with a ping pong table, a pool table, a plasma screen television and a chocolate fountain. I decided before I go over to the chocolate fountain I better go see what I was doing here. I ran into another room and on every single spot of the walls there were posters of Amanda Bynes. I went to go explore the room when I noticed something

different about myself when I walked past the mirror. I looked back into the mirror and I went in shock. I had turned into Amanda Bynes! I screamed I was so surprised. One minute after I screamed a women in a black suite came rushing in and ask me if I was ok.

ILL TYPE THE REST LATER

SORRY I PUT IT IN THE WRONG CATAGORY

Answer 1

Not bad! But who is Amanda Bynes?

Answer 2

It sounds good to me so far! :)

Answer 3

yeah it sounds good from what you have here. its interesting =]