Somebody can help me, please...english writing?

Question

I am a mexican medicine student, I did an abstract of the paper, but my professor said that I need to improve in STYLE and SYNTAXIS. I did my best, anyone can help me please to give some changes to improve the abstract, Thanks a lot.
Eosinophilic fasciitis (EF) is a disease of unknown aetiology characterized by cutaneous swelling and indurations that affects predominantly the extremities, elevated immunoglobulins, and peripheral eosinophilia.
Objective: Evaluation of efficacy of Cyclosporine A in patient without response to steroid treatment with diagnosis of EF.
Patients: We report 3 patients with clinical, laboratory and pathologic characteristics of EF, whose did not response to steroid treatment. The main symptoms were orange skin, groove signs and indurations of the affected extremities, scleroderma-like signs. All patients had peripheral eosinophilia and increased creatine-kinase (CK). Pathologic findings were thickening and inflammation of the fascia and normal epidermis.

Answer 1

The corrections are:
I did my best. Can anyone please help me make some changes to improve the abstract? Thanks a lot.

Eosinophilic Fasciitis (EF) is a disease of unknown etiology characterized by cutaneous swelling and indurations which predominately affects the extremities. It is characterized by elevated immunoglobulins and peripheral eosinophilia.

Objective: The evaluation of the efficacy of Cyclosporine A in patients with the diagnosis of EF who did not respond to steroid treatment.

We report three (3) patients with the clinical, laboratory, and pathologict characteristics of EF who did not repond to steroid treatment.
The patients' main symptoms were orange skin, groove signs, and indurations of the affected exrtemities, which suggest scleroderma-like signs. All patients had peripheral eosinophilia and increased creatinine-kinase (CK). Thickening and inflammation of the fascia were pathologic findings. The epidermis was normal.

Hey, good for you to do so well with your English, especially in the study of medicine.

Answer 2

Dear Future DR.

As I am not a medical person I use the exact words that you have used to do a little correction. May be other able medical people could come to your help. I am not a native english speaker. English is my second language. If you find any spelling errors pl. forgive me. I did not check the mecical dictionary for the terms you have used. (My wife is a former Matron of a Hospital). There is a medical dic. in our collection.

I felt humbled that I could help a Medical student in a little way. I like your attitude. You have humbled yourself by asking others. You will be a great DR. With best wishes. Bye.
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I am a Mexican medical sudent. I did an abstract for a paper but my professor says I need to improve in style and syntaxis.

I did my best. Can someone help me. Please make some changes to improve my abstract. Thanks a lot.

Eosinophilic fasciitis (EF) is a disease of unknown aetiology, characterized by cutaneous swelling and indurations that affect preodminantly the extremities, elevated immunoglobulins and peripheral eosinophilia.

Objective:- Evaluation of efficacy of Cycloporine A, in patient without response to seroid treatment with dianosis of EF.

Patients:- We report 3 patients with clinical , laboratrory and pathological characteristics of EF. They did not respond to steroid treatment. Their main symptoms were "orange skin', groove signs and indurations of the affected extremities with scleroderma- like signs.
All three patients had peripherl eosinophilia and increased creatine-kinase (CK).

Pathological findings were thickening and inflammation of the facia and normal epidermis.

Answer 3

The word is " s y n t a x ".

I think yours is fine for now. Your Prof is a jerk.

You will improve, the more you write.

Answer 4

no comprende espanole......dog