Can u please check this for any grammar mistake?

Question

Or maybe change it into a better sentence.

'How do we work?

Our company provides SMS service for all users in .... We are able to send as many SMS as possible within a short period. With our transaction record, which is more than a hundred thousand, we would like to give opportunities to other users to achieve success along with us.

You are welcome to read and comprehend our concept.

If there is any problem, we are in the process of writing 'Common Questions' (FAQ) for all SMS Profit users.

Kindly fill the provided form if you have any question.

1) The payment is 100% fulfilled clearly.
2) Holds a high record of users' contentment.
3) Profit is divided fairly.
4) Practise the Win-win Situation (No one loses anything)
5) The FIRST company in ....'

Please help! I'd really appreciate it!!!

Answer 1

How do we work?

*I'm not sure what you mean by this. What do we do? or What makes our company the best?

Our company provides SMS service for all users in ....

*Really ALL users (I assume the ... is your country or city?) or does it just offer SMS services to all users?


We are able to send as many SMS as possible within a short period.

*Uh, yeah, but everyone is "able to do" as much "as possible". What about "Our technology allows us to send xxx SMSes per minute." Or do you mean each user can send a lot?


With our transaction record, which is more than a hundred thousand, we would like to give opportunities to other users to achieve success along with us.

*I don't really know what you mean here. We have sent more than 100 000 SMSes so far, and... (Are you advertising for users--how are they going to "achieve success"?--or for investors?)

You are welcome to read and comprehend our concept.

*And comprehend isn't necessary--not sure a "concept" can be read, but you can say "read about" if you really like "concept"--otherwise "our prospectus" maybe?

If there is any problem, we are in the process of writing 'Common Questions' (FAQ) for all SMS Profit users.

*That's not very reassuring, I think if there are problems, people will want answers now, not once the FAQ is written.

Kindly fill the provided form if you have any question.

*Fill IN (BrE) or fill OUT (AmE)...if you have any questions. You can't use "any" with the singular, either use "a question" or " any questions" but "any questions" is better because it sound more helpful.

1) The payment is 100% fulfilled clearly.

*Don't know what that means.

2) Holds a high record of users' contentment.

*Who holds a high record? "High record" doesn't sound right, numbers would be more effective. "User satisfaction" sounds better than "users' contentment".

3) Profit is divided fairly.
4) Practise the Win-win Situation (No one loses anything)

*Great, but that doesn't really tell me anything. I'd capitalize both "Win"s.

5) The FIRST company in ....'

*Chronologically? Or do you mean "the best" or "the top"?

Answer 2

[Our company provides SMS service for all users] - SMS stands for Short Message Service, so therefore, i dont really think you should include the word service again. You're kind of repeating yourself, arent you...?

[ The payment is 100% fulfilled clearly.] - this sentence doesnt make sense. 100% fulfilled clearly? What are you trying to say?

Answer 3

I would take out and comprehend
put quotations around common questions
what holds a high record of users' contentment?
switch around 100% and fulfilled
change practise to practice
change question to questions

Answer 4

Use the quotation marks around anything you want quoted instead of the apostrophe mark.

Example: Instead of 'Common Questions' use "Common Questions"

I'm not an English major or anything, but I did learn that from a class.

Answer 5

ah yeah, i noticed the apostrophe you used instead of quotation mark. also the spelling of practice, and the part when you mentioned "within a short period" maybe better "within a short period of time".

Answer 6

It's ok.Go ahead with it.