how does this sound?

Question

The cultures and the lifestyles of the 1920s were just being created a new. Such as flappers – created by John Held Jr. Flappers wore bobbed hair, makeup, and dresses that came right below their knee. They were always trying to do something new. Like new fashion, behavior, and dancing. Also another new thing about their cultures and lifestyles was an assembly line. Which was when different workers at different stations, who would add parts as the belt conveyor pulls it along. These were many of the new cultures and lifestyles of the 1020s. At that period of time things were just getting created. New inventions, fashion, and leisure time.


The cultures and lifestyles of the 1920s differ from right now because now we are used to everything. The inventions, fashion, money, education, job, and so on. Mostly all inventions were made around in the 1920s. So it was more important for them. It was very different for them. But now we can expect how something might look like. For example, a car. Back then they all looked the same. Nowadays, there are different types of cards with different features and colors. So that is how the cultures and lifestyles of the 1920s are different from now.

wat i had to explain was how is the cultures and lifestyles of the 1920s different from now

Answer 1

I see the points you're trying to make but some of your sentences are rather confusing.

"They were always trying to do something new." Whose they? and right after talking about talking about hair you jump to an assembly line.

"It was more important to them.It was very differnt for them." You could easily combine those two sentences. Apart, they're rather akward.

Just work on the fomat, and the way you word stuff that you're trying to explain, and you'll be golden.

Answer 2

From what I can glean from your posting, you seem to have a good comprehension of what you want to say, but you're having difficulty in expressing it.

You've fallen in to the trap of so many beginning writers, that of writing in sentence fragments, rather than real, complete sentences, i.e.: "The inventions, fashion, money, education, job, and so on."

This is not a sentence: there is no verb.

"For example, a car." Same thing, there is no verb.

So, I'm sorry; but it "sounds" pretty awful. You really need to focus on how to write a complete sentence.

Wotan

Answer 3

Smiley !! Learn to be more concise !! Just too many words to follow your train of thought !! Very Boring, That is how it sounds. Sorry!!