These love lyrics are a combined result of two Y!A writers who asked for my help last month. How did we do?

Question

Never In My Dreams

You’re here in my heart, I’ll never be alone
You always take my pain away
When I hear that sweet voice on the phone
Like coffee, your love starts my day

I wish that I could wake every sunrise
To you, by my side every time
I thrill to dream of your eyes
Staring dark and straight into mine

CHORUS
The sting from the tears I feel each time you leave
lets me know the pain is real and I still believe
Someday, I don’t know when, we'll be as one
I have faith. Until then, I can tell everyone
I may be alone, but never in my dreams

BRIDGE
And if I were a million miles away, I'd miss your smile
And if I had a million walls in the way, I'd see your eyes
My love, there's nothing I wouldn't do
To be right there next to you
Right there next to you

INSTRUMENTAL BRIDGE

BRIDGE
And if I were a million miles away, I'd miss your smile
And if I had a million walls in the way, I'd see your eyes
My love, there's nothing I wouldn't do
To be right there next to you
Right there next to you

CHORUS
The sting from the tears I feel each time you leave
lets me know the pain is real and I still believe
Someday, I don’t know when, we'll be as one
I have faith. Until then, I can tell everyone
I may be alone, but never in my dreams

REPEAT CHORUS, ROUNDING WITH BRIDGE, TO FADE

Answer 1

That's one of the best songs I've seen on here. Now all you need is some great background music and look out Nashville!

Answer 2

Wow!
Guys (uh, gals?) who are you going to get to set that to music? Better be someone really good.
I can hear a string orchestra in the background, but that's just me. I could also go for a good jazz combo, with Wynton Marsalis on solo.
Ok, enough musical schwärmerei.
I like the fact that you have not succumbed to a steady , monotonous meter, but have dared to let it be broken up from time to time. That enhances the text in that it makes the listener pay attention. ( Nothing like old rum-ti-tum to put your audience to sleep)
the emotions are genuine, and very intense.
Congratulations!

Answer 3

oh my goddd. That became relaxing relaxing relaxing now my Daddy's take the T fowl away. Doh ..... the place became I? fairly good (you at the instant are not making those issues up are you? Hehe could remember that one. With acknowledgements to the sea coast Boys for kindly not giving me permission to reproduce their lyrics. playstation have you ever tried to spell acknowledgements? bloody stupid (bleep) (bleep) be conscious

Answer 4

fffffffffffffantastic.