Nobody can hurt her now
She won't cry anymore
The gun is being held to her head
She says
You can't kill me baby
I'm already dead
2007-11-14 10:11:48 · 5 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
The meter of the fourth line isn't long enough, but the message is clear.
2007-11-14 11:09:50 · answer #1 · answered by Your Uncle Dodge! 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Line 3-The gun, held to her head
I think it sounds better without "being"
2007-11-14 18:33:27 · answer #2 · answered by G Mama 3 · 2⤊ 0⤋
a lil gory..but definetly very good..it rhymes perfectly and makes perfect sense..kinda! haha- keep writing- you're great!
2007-11-14 18:20:43 · answer #3 · answered by cheerchickchris15 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
i like it!
2007-11-14 18:19:16 · answer #4 · answered by Felicia T 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Thanks for posting twice!!
+2
2007-11-14 18:17:35 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋