The hellbound darkness swallows my scream
As I lay here in the corner at night
His poison kisses were too intoxicating
Too Toxic
For my heart
As I lay here in my coffin
Powered and Painted White
I think of a plan of my revenge
2007-11-13 12:06:19 · 39 answers · asked by Anonymous in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Mhm I have more. Check my questions.
2007-11-13 12:09:08 · update #1
Okay heres another one.
The shadows of hell scream burn it all
Shes lying alone
Listening to the shadows scream
Burn in hell
2007-11-13 12:19:22 · update #2
nice
2007-11-13 12:09:06 · answer #1 · answered by lisa n 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The best revenge is to live well, it really burns em up. Like the poem it really opened up a great visual for me...nice!
2007-11-13 12:10:21 · answer #2 · answered by s01psb 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
perhaps you've seen too many vampire movies. ;o)
I like the imagery though. well written.
I'd say you have something that touches people. I mean for God's sake, look at how many people took the time to make a comment about this one piece! It's just COOL!
2007-11-13 13:36:42 · answer #3 · answered by autumlovr 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Wow....thats really good, you should right more like this. Its very deep. Its kind of harsh but soothing and calm at the same time. its really good, keep righting and posting them!!!
you have a talent that many people would love to have.
2007-11-13 12:10:04 · answer #4 · answered by Jenny S 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Entertaining. Graphic, spicy helltones. Love the "silence" parallel between the first and last lines. Keep belting them out...you've got skills!
2007-11-13 12:15:34 · answer #5 · answered by 4Seasons 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
All of you who think it is too dark or scary... be quiet. Many people write like that and I think that Jenn is very good at writing poetry... much better than me. I write dark, deep, depressing things like that too and it is a good way to get things out and express them. Good job and good luck with future peoms!!!!!!
2007-11-13 12:16:28 · answer #6 · answered by dumbledoresarmy35 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
is it the current rage to write poems without hope? Why all the darkness? The reality of life is not just pessimism for you, is it? If so, you'll need to find true meaning in life. How would you propose to write a poem about searching for Truth?
2007-11-13 12:09:59 · answer #7 · answered by bwlobo 7 · 0⤊ 2⤋
It is a good poem. You should think of going into writing for a living.
2007-11-13 12:09:02 · answer #8 · answered by tonya j 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is a good poem. It has a good theme. Also it makes you want to hear another poem about what you wrote. Great job.
2007-11-13 12:09:52 · answer #9 · answered by blllla2 3 · 0⤊ 1⤋
VERY COOL!!!
I'd like to hear more of it! It sounds like the beginning of a awesome dark short story to be honest.
2007-11-13 12:09:41 · answer #10 · answered by Rain 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
I think you have talent but its a bit deppresin if you want the truth but keep up the good work!
2007-11-13 12:09:39 · answer #11 · answered by lisa c 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋