Could you please rate this poem on the scale of 1 to 10? Thank you in advance.?

Question

Filling the Emptiness Within

Already used to walking alone
She stood on the edge of the woods
Letting the sun warm her face
It's touch might smooth away every thought
The roughness of the grass on her finger tips
Letting it fill her mind
Memorising the pattern of the leaves of the forest floor
Saplings turned and twisted towards the light
To keep these things forever
To have them fill the emptiness inside
A feeling so profound
She took up her pencil and drew
The only way to free her of loneliness

Answer 1

I give you a 10 for imagery, but the poem lacks finesse.
To keep these things forever
To have them fill the emptiness inside
A feeling so profound
She took up her pencil and drew
The only way to free her of loneliness......
are good lines and express the mood quite well, but in my opinion if you end the poem "She took up her pencil and drew" it will serve the purpose and the last line will not be necessary. The poem is complete without the last line.
It is a good poem, keep it up, Mumtaz!

Answer 2

10

Answer 3

Wow! What a poem!! breaking apart is amazingly tough. The February 2009 unsleeping pages 18 - 20 might actually assist you thru this undesirable time alongside with Jehovah God, Psalm fifty 5:22. My score is 9 out of 10.

Answer 4

1-10 according to what? how can you rate poetry with numbers?
it's quite good...
note:
it's=it is. its=belonging to it

i think it needs an edit. all writing needs editing. you can't just come out with perfection first time. read thorugh, change it here and there, even if it's just a word at a time, or comma placement or something. after a few reads, hopefully you'll have the best you can get.

edit: what?? where are the hordes of spelling mistakes everyone keeps going on about? confused?

Answer 5

I liked it. Spellcheck it though.
The last line is way weak. The poem is fresh up until the end, and then, boom. You do the whole cliche' emotional switch-a-roo at the end. Don't make it a metaphor for lonliness, the imagery is too pretty and it detracts from it.

It really is a pretty piece of writing otherwise. 9 or 10 if you revise the ending.

Answer 6

Its interesting but it lacks a flow or a cadence.

The imagery is an 8 the total package is about a 5.

Keep writing though. I have always found with my own writing I tend to like things others dislike and vice versa. Try to read it out loud about ten times. Whatever your tongue stumbles on, is what you need to revise.

Good luck.

Answer 7

It's a lovely poem that captures an expressive moment of triumph over loneliness. I love the flow and the feel of Nature in your poem. I would give it a 9.

Answer 8

i dont really know about poetry but this poem sounds like something that would come out of a book. i rate your poem with a 8 i can actually picture the forest

Answer 9

I like the imagery. I can see where you can add more details to it more vivid but that comes with practice. Liked your word usage and flow.

Fav line:
She took up her pencil and drew


As an artist I relate....though when I take up my pencil I write. Job well done....I give you an 8

Write on !!


Earth

Answer 10

i will giv 10 points 2 it. after all u r the writer.