what do you think about this poem tried to make it better?

Question

I remember a time when everything between us was cool.

No stress, no worries, no strings attach Just thinking about you and I, not worrying about consequences

We didn't want everyone to know...

A secret that is ours to hold and not to tell, of long walks and late nights on the phone.

Rumors throughout the hallway of a story untold, of two beauties who were possibly in love.

One who knew the ins and outs and the other who knew nothing of the word OUT.

This created a mess consisting of unwanted stress that eventually turned into less... and bad... and worst.

Today we are two worlds apart.

She moved on, I moved on then WE finally moved on.

Reunited: now seems to be hopeless
But we still have those memories we shared that get blurry every time I tried to remember

Answer 1

The whole thing is OK. However, the part:This created a mess etc etc, need some work as well that: she moved on etc etc.Look into the whole poem and work with the words. Be clear and not complicated. Try not to force the words into the concept.