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The Art of War
A soldier wearily reconnoiters,
Unscopeable defilade blankets him,
A sightline opening unencumbered,
Paratroopers envelop egress outs,
Fire away projectile unstoppable,
Insurgency targeted, faceless foe,
A bullets momentum indiscreetly,
Disemboweling rapidly, swiftly dead,
The escape quietly organizes,
Military discipline orders it.
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Hot
The desert calls to no man
Dunes replete with bleached white bones
Endless waves of sand, one color, one sound
Anonymous, nameless expanse
Scorched and blistered rock faces
Seared rage sweltering, holding fire
Motionless specter, sighting
Opportunity, egress clear
JAR triggered,
Directed,
Away…silently
*****
I can't find "The Dance with Death." I'll look for it at lunch.
2007-11-12 01:16:01 · 12 answers · asked by TD Euwaite? 6 in Politics & Government ➔ Military
The first one was in response to a DFA poetry challenge. Note the syllable count per line, it’s a helix.
2007-11-12 01:29:29 · update #1
I'm actually not feeling well...so my "thinking is blurred". However, your poem needs no brains to be appreciated. I could just simply give them a read and...Voila! Your artistic cadence and cogency are strikingly undeniable! I always enjoyed reading everything that you write--->even when i'm mentally disturbed!!! haha ;-)
2007-11-12 05:28:43 · answer #1 · answered by Dark Dickinsonian 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Great job - a little word heavy in the first one, but I guess that was your intention. I like "Hot," it's a great description of the desert. Keep up the great work.
2007-11-12 02:04:43 · answer #2 · answered by Frosty 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Thank you everyone for your support. We need more noble people like yourself to assist our fellows soldiers where ever they might be.
US Army 15 years
OIF 2003
US Army Recruiter 3 years running in Texas
2007-11-12 02:45:55 · answer #3 · answered by ? 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
have you ever considered a donkey make himself into an @ss? have you ever considered a monkey getting severe on grass? have you ever heard a birdy making a music to himself I drained to position in writing a poem yet I even bored myself.
2016-10-24 02:19:16 · answer #4 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You have a God given talent fueled by your soul which yearns to be set free to write as you wish and express yourself fully.
Oh yeah, the poems. They were OK.
Joke, loved it TD, very good.
2007-11-12 02:05:18 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Very great poems of the people that we don;t thank enough' our servicemen and women ...Thank-you for writing words for them today.
2007-11-12 02:48:55 · answer #6 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very good. Among your best.
You are good with this subject.
2007-11-12 01:30:37 · answer #7 · answered by Lady Annabella-VInylist 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Bloody good!
2007-11-12 01:21:40 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
realy good
2007-11-12 01:25:59 · answer #9 · answered by crusinana1 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋
*sniff* that's touching.
2007-11-12 02:10:03 · answer #10 · answered by Alexa G 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋