Do you like this poem?

Question

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Chaplains on a wall
TD Euwaite

Lieutenant Capodanno
Chaplain, U.S. Navy
Repeatedly…
Ran toward enemy fire
Dragging Marines to safety
Many wounds, arms, legs, face
Mortar round blew off a hand
Again he ran, this time
To a Corpsman on the ground,
Heavy machine gun rounds
Cut him down

Major Watters
Chaplain, 173rd Airborne Brigade
After the perimeter was pulled back
Three times he stepped over the wire
Through friendly and unfriendly fire
Brought solders back, on his back
Fell while aiding the wounded

There’s a long, low wall in Washington
Many named there
Passed to the next life
While holding the hands of these
When you go, passing slowly
Whisper low and softly
Thank you

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Answer 1

thank you TD, I salute them and you for keeping their memory alive.
BTW, last time I visited the Wall I could not believe the atmosphere, people walking by, talking loudly, laughing aloud, joking, not even looking at the monument. You get distinct feeling they are just there to be able to say "yeah, been there"

Tracers stitch the night sky
With dashes of light
I am scared and angry,
Whose is this fight?
Death dozes in palm groves
Don’t wake her! Let her sleep!
If she opens her eyes
More mothers will weep,
Rice paddy mirrors
In the hell of lush green
I know where I am
But forgot where I’ve been
I know what I am,
But don’t know my heart -
a stranger despairing
in the dead of night
with my weeping soul
Over a young man
They both knew once,
man who liked to sing and smile and dance…
He is dead now, never to come back
But there will be no funeral
No final farewell, nor from children waves
No weeping willow fingers caressing his grave
missing another cross in the gardens of stone…
He lives on, with his spirit gone…

Answer 2

For me a poem has to have rhythm. It does not inevitably ought to rhyme despite the fact that it desires to hit my emotions. i think of clarity of expression is substantial to boot. i do no longer choose for to 2nd wager what i'm analyzing approximately. I continuously seek for what I term "poetic gemstones"interior the textual content textile.

Answer 3

Thank you everyone for your support. We need more noble people like yourself to assist our fellows soldiers where ever they might be.

US Army 15 years
OIF 2003
US Army Recruiter 3 years running in Texas

Answer 4

Nice poem about great solders that have gave their lifes to protect and serve under all conditions and under all problems... Thank-you for saluting them' on this memorial day.,

Answer 5

Ok, I like it....
How about this one....

Early in the morning
Late at night
Two dead boys began to fight
Back to back they faced each other
Pulled their swords and shot each other
A deaf policeman heard the noise
Then came to the rescue of the two dead boys

Answer 6

Honestly the poem made me cry. I just recently got out of the Army and it wasn't until my old unit re-deployed (this time without me) that I wished I didn't. Reading this makes me want to be there with the rest of my family. That's what my old unit is to me, my family. One of them being my husband. I pray every day that I won't have to see one of there names on that wall. This poem is beautiful.

Answer 7

Good poem.
It's important to remember.
This kind of thing puts any snivels that I might have into perspective.
Now I go off to work...

Answer 8

I like it (the poems), it really is amazing what these no-combatants did for our men during the time of war, courage such as this is only given by God.

Answer 9

Stop the war in Iraq in order to save more lives and cut the cost of government spending to defray the expenses of basic public services.

Answer 10

Seems like you need more before the last stanza. Like something that ties the actions of those two men together, etc. It's missing something. Good start, though.