Autumn Is Here
Never mine
to hold,
it soon
ran its course,
faded, then
disappeared
exactly as feared,
without
so much
as a word.
youth,
like jet stream,
made passage
with little ceremony.
I was caught
unaware,
how hard
it would be
to let go
of that identity.
Memories
of spring,
and warm,
summer days,
still have a life
of their own
but the young girl is gone.
Autumn
is now here
in my eyes,
and winter waits
behind them.
2007-11-11 16:23:42 · 6 answers · asked by autumlovr 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
This is really extraordinary the way the passing of time and the coming of winter are so delicately balanced and that the winter of life waits behind the eyes of autumn. Beautiful. You have done a great job of removing everything that is unnecessary -every word counts. This is really great.
2007-11-11 16:40:14 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
This poem is really very good... it captures that brief bit of autumn that always slips into winter too quickly. Great choice of words and the short lines make everything flow together really fast but well. Good job. =)
2007-11-12 01:13:50 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I would come up with another way to say "ran its course," "have a life of their own," and "without so much as a word" because they are all cliches. Also wondered why "youth" is not capitalized but all the other first letters in your stanzas are capitalized.
2007-11-12 02:14:30 · answer #3 · answered by margot 5 · 1⤊ 1⤋
Beatiful! As "September Song" Your words speak to mature
women world wide, Kudos!!!!
2007-11-12 07:35:35 · answer #4 · answered by jenny 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
soft simple words theat flow with beautiful meaning
smooth simple poem,
ur natural language enacts the natural and swift changes in season...
lovely
2007-11-12 02:27:13 · answer #5 · answered by cleo s 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
wow i really liked this one. i like the hidden meaning. nice. keep writing.
2007-11-12 00:30:23 · answer #6 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋