What way can you express the sentence powerfully?

Question

How can you write this sentence more creatively than it is? Please make it short, and put the strongness into the sentence.
Here is the sentence:
This setback further motivated him to achieve the high aspirations that his mother had for him, and this aspiration made him achieve good grades through out the middle school.
Note: setback is a struggle of him. I don't want to say good grades, but I still want to say that he had good grades. How can I say that other way? He has achieved A through out the school. What else can I use instead of good grades?

Answer 1

This setback further motivated him to achieve the high aspirations his mother had for him, which in turn made him reach outstanding achievements throughout middle school.

Answer 2

Achieving the high aspirations his mother had for him, which included getting good grades (some of which were A's throughout middle school), was due in great part to earlier setbacks. He made sure those setbacks were the exception and not the rule.

Answer 3

How about this:

He turned what was considered a setback into inspiration to achieve good grades throughout middle school, achieving his mother's aspirations for him, as well.

Answer 4

The setback was a blessing. Coupled with his mother's aspirations for his future, the two strengthened his resolve--he'd be the best student in middle school.
or--if it has to be just one sentence
The setback plus his mother's aspirations for him equaled a firm resolve to achieve the top spot in academic success.
or--shorter
The setback plus his mother's aspirations for him could only equal academic success in middle school.

Answer 5

"This setback motivated him further to fulfil the high hopes his mother had for him; he was energised to become a straight-A student throughout middle school."

You could put 'inspired' for 'energised'. If you think the semi-colon (;) is too sophisticated, you could use a dash ( - ) but semi-colons are good and useful to know about.

You could also put 'to achieve good grades' instead of 'to become a straight-A student.' Maybe write each version out and read it out loud to get the best effect? Good luck!

Answer 6

Angered at this setback, a fire burned within him and he redoubled his efforts, attaining the lofty goals that he knew he could achieve

Answer 7

He has achieved the highest grades possible

Answer 8

instead of good grades say academic achievements