Our officiant for my wedding this Saturday is a good friend of me and my fiance. He asked us to write 5 words that mean love, the reasons to be geing married, ect....I'm not that analytical, so I thought I'd give him an excerpt from my journal that I wrote about my fiance when I first met him. Please feel free to be as brutally honest as you want, as I don't want to embarrass myself if this sucks....here it is:
"The look feels so right, the touch even more so. I feel as if I belong to this soul and body- as if I've been here before, and I have returned after a long search that unknowingly lead me directly home. The instant I saw, was the instant I knew~ fate questioned me, and now all solutions point me in the direction I'm heading."
Not sure about that last sentence....please help!
2007-11-07 15:54:45 · 8 answers · asked by chloe1995 3 in Family & Relationships ➔ Weddings
Thank you "I love weddings" girl!! I guess I meant "led" instead of "lead".
2007-11-07 16:15:52 · update #1
thank you for all of your positve comments! I really appreciate it, since this is so personal (since it's from my private journal). Everyone is sure making me confident to share this out loud with our wedding guests...it's a little scary to do so! Thank you!!
2007-11-07 19:22:32 · update #2
My god that is so good.. its sounds really nice... and so romantic... and the sentiment of it being an excerpt from your diary only adds to it... this will sounds great with your vows... good luck... though i don't think u'll need it u sound like you love him very much.
2007-11-07 17:34:18 · answer #1 · answered by crystal_bubbles7 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Hi Chloe and congratulations!
Is your officiant going to read this? I'm kind of a part-time English nut. It's all my years of working as a secretary and typing up many, many things.
If he is going to read it, you may want to put the punctuation in different spots. That would be the only suggestion I have. Here is how I would do the punctuation. [Note: the world "lead" should probably be "leads."
"The look feels so right, the touch even more so. I feel as if I belong to this soul and body. As if I've been here before, and I have returned after a long search that unknowingly leads me directly home. The instant I saw, was the instant I knew. Fate questioned me, and now all solutions point me in the direction I'm heading."
It's beautiful. Good luck and I hope you have a beautiful wedding and a happy marriage!
2007-11-08 00:12:07 · answer #2 · answered by iloveweddings 7 · 3⤊ 1⤋
I think that would be such a great idea to include it in your ceremony! It is so special that you have a record of exactly what you were thinking when you first met him.
I agree with lucy l about leaving out the last bit. "Fate questioned me, and now all solutions point me in the direction I'm heading" sounds like a mixed metaphor. Other than that, the piece is very meaningful.
One question: Are you sure your officiant didn't have something particular in mind when he asked for five words that mean love? He may be planning to use those words in some special way in his message, so you may want to supply him with those as well.
2007-11-08 03:17:50 · answer #3 · answered by Emmy Jo (13 weeks with #2) 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Its very good except for the last little bit doesnt quite make sense to me so perhaps leave it at 'instant I knew'. It was nice and most people will relate to the same feeling so will end up a bit teary....which is always nice at a wedding so definately include it .
2007-11-08 00:06:16 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
It is very intimate and from the heart. Something that I would prefer to say in private as I am a very shy person, but it is beautiful and if you feel confident about speaking in front of all those people then it is very touching.
2007-11-08 07:06:22 · answer #5 · answered by sparkleythings_4you 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It is lovely and speaks from your heart. Don't question it or try to improve it. It is perfect as it is because YOU wrote it when you first met him. He is lucky to have you.
Congratulations and wishing you a long and happy life together.
2007-11-08 00:03:52 · answer #6 · answered by dddanse 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
Thats really beautiful. Don't question yourself. You got it right the first time.
2007-11-08 03:10:30 · answer #7 · answered by darrigirl 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
It sounds beautiful and is from the heart.
2007-11-08 00:04:16 · answer #8 · answered by qwerty 4 · 1⤊ 0⤋