Check out this poem I wrote(revised)?

Question

The Real Me

To you, I am a friend,
a classmate,
someone you talk to.
You know a little
about my past.
But you still do not
know the real me.
The real me
hurts all the time.
The real me is afraid
of what tomorrow may bring.
The real me is suffering
because of mine
and others mistakes.
The real me is weak,
but I do not show it,
because I want to be strong.
The real me is losing faith.
The real me wants help,
but the person what I am
trying to be does not.
Who am I trying to be?
Someone who has no
worries or cares?
I am trying to be someone
who wants to fit in,
when the real me
wants to stand out.
The real me wants
to be different.

What do you think?

Suggestions?

Answer 1

your poem is so good i feel like i know you...my 16 yr old son has just discovered writing poetry helps him feel better. He has written several, and submitted them to poetry.com. keep writing, maybe their is nothing wrong, but in your poem a person can sense you are hurting. you have a talent, keep it going :) as a parent of a teenager who is struggling with being different, your poem fits feelings that others are having too.

Answer 2

Hi Hun,

I took some time in reading your poem and found it to be very meaningful. It is very obvious that you wear your heart on your sleeve and that you're a very down to earth person. I can honestly say that the poem in itself is very different from others because it describes who you are . This poem alone, really makes your true colors shine above the rest!

Keep writing the fabulous poems, we all here on Y! love appreciate em'!

Answer 3

Do you want to know what we think about the poem, or the problems it's about?

Be different. Stand out. Life is too short to live on someone elses terms.

Answer 4

it sure says alot about you/someone...very nice

Answer 5

It is pretty and has passion! :)