that im going to lay down on a pillow of tears
and fall into a dream of surrounding despair
and feel so trapped that the mind is my lair
I ask you this, do you care?
That tommorow i'll wake up like tonight has not been
and drift through the day like the mirror in my dreams
seeing only whats reflected but not what's actually there
I ask you this, do you care?
That nobody can see through my cardboard crate
which only the weakest of people would break
and only the strongest of people would care
too resist the weakest barriers that gaurd my marble stairs
2007-10-30 22:50:38 · 20 answers · asked by Anonymous in Entertainment & Music ➔ Polls & Surveys
Yes I wrote this.
2007-10-31 09:07:35 · update #1
Why worry am I care thou or not
why worry am I not scold you not
for naughty deeds thou have done in your past.
Still my love always with you if you
remember me in thoughts, whilst in your deeds.
am the power of grasping sorrows of others
drawn in the draughty islands, with no food to eat
still surviving with poor skelton with no mass on them.
Oh Jesus am me the God to look to the suffering only
Give me the power to flourish all living beings,
leaving no soul in grief and ask for Care
2007-10-31 03:31:38 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Yes...
I do care...
Because...
We passed through, long ago,
Illusionary private hells...
And now...with red eyes of sunrise...
One more...all night you and I...
With shades and more, we hide away,
High above, the sky...a river of gray...
Like an ash-hot, stormy collision...
Our two extremes...a lost religion...
We'll hear light's sound, and see thunder's name...
Then leave our shells...no longer in vain...
At the end, we'll kick up the smoldering leaves...
Of our melted wings...and burning dreams...
So...
Yes...I DO care...(great poem question)
Your poem is most excellent...I liked it very much...in fact...I liked it so much...I thought it deserved a poetic answer in kind...hope you liked mine...and yes...I wrote it...just now...for you, babe...for u...
2007-10-31 23:33:39 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Good poem.
Post on Allpoetry.com for helpful critiques on your work. Maybe you can get the work published in a book one day.
Keep writing. You're good.
2007-10-31 05:57:19 · answer #3 · answered by Top Alpha Wolf 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
will i gotta be honest with you. I do care about you and if you wrote this i'll say gave yourself two thumps up and 10/10 because you are a good writer. good.
2007-10-31 05:58:43 · answer #4 · answered by ? 7 · 3⤊ 0⤋
Seriously that was excellent, I write creatively too, and I like your words and the scene that they form good job.
2007-10-31 06:10:07 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
Very Very good. If you wrote thst.. Pat on back.. I wish i could write stuff like that... Honest good work
2007-10-31 05:53:52 · answer #6 · answered by Marco P 2 · 2⤊ 0⤋
well,
should i dare
to care
will you be in that box
or just a pile of rocks
and dont take those stairs
if no body cares
you may climb to high
and we might wonder why
so please dont cry
we will be with you
by and by
SMILE
2007-10-31 06:32:52 · answer #7 · answered by ? 6 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Yes I care! Can't you tell? :) Good job
2007-10-31 06:00:53 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 2⤊ 0⤋
Sorry not today! It is Halloween Cheer up and have some fun.
2007-10-31 05:56:27 · answer #9 · answered by Patty M 5 · 2⤊ 1⤋
where is this from
it seems like my life
2007-10-31 13:46:00 · answer #10 · answered by Kata 3 · 1⤊ 0⤋