The stairway.
She could only sit for a minute or two
But each day at at 12 she was there.
Pulling the sticky notes off of her back
And ripping the gum from her hair.
She never reduced to mere crying
She would not give them any gain
So she sat in her spot on the stairway
And fought back a day's worth of pain.
Her eyes were fixated on one spot
But her ears were scanning around
Her personal radar alerting
On any unwelcoming sound.
The one thought that kept her from falling.
Was that no one knew she was there
Protected by railings and echoes
Ske knew she was safe on her stair.
The days just got harder and harder
Even the stairs were not keeping her sane
For the fist time she cried for those monsters
But she would not cry for them again.
She crawled to the top of her stairway.
And gave it a due last goodbye.
The one place that kept her protected
The one place she wanted to die.
She felt the air moving beneath her
Preparing for contact with land
But she was no longer falling,
Someone had took hold of her hand.
2007-10-30 09:55:50 · 21 answers · asked by Wannabe Lyricist 1 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
For the First Time**
2007-10-30 09:56:54 · update #1
For the First Time**
2007-10-30 09:57:04 · update #2
My baout me on my homepage will explain what the poem is about. It sounds pathetic but sometimes it is easier to confide in strangers.
2007-11-01 08:01:48 · update #3
I think it`s great. Well done you.
Very moving.
2007-10-30 09:58:57 · answer #1 · answered by JOMAMO IS BACK 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's great and it was very well put it. But try not to use or make sense of every line you wrote. Poems sometimes does not have to make sense and it can be more touching and understandable better. Try not to use the " it, and, or, for," so much, but just write and use the actual meaning of the words and what you saying exactly, so you get the point across.
I am a poetry writer myself
2007-10-30 10:09:25 · answer #2 · answered by Dr. Red 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
'The path of least resistance is an easy route to tread. We choose it every morning when we stumble out of bed. Why should we strive and struggle when it seems our way is barred. When we can sit and wallow in the habits which die hard...' This old poem has a particular piquancy for you at the moment. You know what you would rather like to do - and what you would prefer not to do any more. Willpower, though, remains irritatingly difficult to summon. Give it one more go. It's worth it.
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2007-11-06 07:45:21 · answer #3 · answered by Oh My God! 6 · 1⤊ 0⤋
When some people say that they want an easy life, they actually mean it. When you profess such an aspiration, you are fibbing! Think, for a moment, about your lifestyle; the world you have created for yourself, the people you have chosen to populate it with, the challenges you have taken on, the responsibilities you have accepted, the dramas you have allowed yourself to become embroiled in. Really. An easy life? What you actually want is an 'easier' life.
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2007-11-01 11:09:22 · answer #4 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
That was great! It was really moving. I could never write poems like that! How long did it take you?! It had a really great rhythm and the rhyming was excellent. I didn't expect the ending at all, thats a great one! That's better than the poems we have to study for our GCSEs. I wish we could study that instead. x
2007-10-31 05:56:42 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I thought it quite good. Regardless of the reasoning behind the poem, it is still that, a quite well written poem. I hope you intend to keep writing, for I see here a talent in the raw that needs practice to bring the latent skills to light. Well done.
dd
2007-11-05 09:35:00 · answer #6 · answered by Dondi 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Moral? Beautiful. Poetic quality? Fair.
I recommend you read Shakespeare's sonnets, to provide you with an imitative model. They're the greatest.
Wotan
2007-10-30 10:06:16 · answer #7 · answered by Alberich 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
well...im not one who usually reads poetry and wasnt expecting much when i clicked on your question!
but having read it i had to read it again cus i thought it was really quite beautiful.
it is a real talent to be able to put your thoughts into words the way you have.it feels like it is written from your own experiences which makes me a little sad but then poetry is meant to stir the senses and emotion. so if you have written it just as a story then it is a brilliant piece of poetry.
2007-10-30 10:10:00 · answer #8 · answered by snafu 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Very meaningful, I read your other poems and you sure do have tremendous talent.
I'm so glad you didn't take that leap, I love your poetry. WOW
Get counseling. My daughter got counseling at 17 because she came to me and told me.
It helped her a lot.
And writing about it helps more than you can imagine.
Hang in there, you have great start.
2007-11-05 13:00:47 · answer #9 · answered by Tigger 7 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Excellent poem. I know the feeling, but life will get better. You were born in 94, well I was born in 39, and It's still getting better.
2007-11-05 08:31:02 · answer #10 · answered by strawcats 2 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Excellent poem. Was it about a bullied child?
2007-11-01 02:33:16 · answer #11 · answered by jay 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋