this is the first song I began to write
it is not completely finished but I want to get an idea of how I am doing
its about a girl I am interested in and we have been hanging out and I am tempted to show her the lyrics but I am not sure if it is too early and that the song may not be as neat and sweet as I think.
let me know what you think
Her fingers runnin’ through her hair
Looking in the mirror
Twisting and turning like a model in despair
I just wish I could see her
Chorus: With looks like this I can barely stand
When she wears that Red Head Band
Just that silky brown red hair
I can’t help but stare
Continues to amaze me to the point I might be crazy.
She walks through the door and the atmosphere becomes hazy
She doesn’t know how much it phases me
If I could just be with her… just maybe
Chorus 2 Walking with my hand in her hand
When she wears that red head band
Just that silky brown red hair
I can’t help but stare
2007-10-27 10:08:31 · 25 answers · asked by Corey 3 in Entertainment & Music ➔ Music ➔ Lyrics
its entitled Red Headband
2007-10-27 10:08:59 · update #1
well i tcould use some work but i think the sentiment is really sweet.if this was for me from a guy not specifically the one you wrote but i would just find it amazing that anyone would put that much thought about me.so i would show her...if she likes you she will just like you more.
2007-10-27 10:13:09 · answer #1 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Not bad but the whole sound of the song is that you're desperate for something. As long as you have a clear focus then it doesn't really matter but lyrics are very important when it comes to a good song. Of course, no one likes songs that are too diverse but if it sounds like you're obsessed with someone it gets kinda old.
What you have is great but you should add some subtlety to it you know?
2007-10-27 10:13:09 · answer #2 · answered by link99354 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Man it sounds like that you are truly crushed over this girl in these lyrics are beautifull who ever your going the sing this song to will be heart warmed to know that you like her so much dude your lyrics are off the meter!
2007-10-27 10:15:01 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
I like it.
Very good with rhyming...
I guess showing it to her would be ok.... does she wear a red head band?
cause if not, that would be weird
lol
brown-red hair should be hyphenated like i just id though
good job
2007-10-27 10:12:49 · answer #4 · answered by ♥ღ♥ღQWERTY♥ღ♥ღ 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
that actually sounds not so bad..at first the red head band thing was weird, but i think that it makes the song more interesting.
2007-10-27 10:12:37 · answer #5 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 1⤋
Truth? Blech.
2007-10-27 10:11:46 · answer #6 · answered by TX Mom 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I really like it, it's beautiful. The lyrics sound like it would make a very good acoustic.
2007-10-27 10:15:52 · answer #7 · answered by Wren 4 · 0⤊ 1⤋
i don't really like it... i think it has the potential... but there has to be some minor changes so it won't sound to cheesy u know?
2007-10-27 10:12:29 · answer #8 · answered by Anonymous · 1⤊ 0⤋
I think its hot and she will probably think is super sweet becase it is
2007-10-27 10:13:20 · answer #9 · answered by Smile!=]♥ 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really like it- especially the title.
2007-10-27 10:11:33 · answer #10 · answered by heytheredelilah2094 2 · 0⤊ 1⤋