I am writing a professional demand letter, and would really like to know if it makes sense to you. Any suggestions would be very much appreciated! Thank you so much in advance! Is contingencies used in the proper context, or no? Please correct as you see fit!
Dear So & So,
I am writing concerning the amount of $0000.00 which is owed to me. This amount is correlative to the following:
- Under the contingencies of no break relief; I demand payment in the amount of $000.00 in reference to: California Labor Code Section 226.7.
- " " mileage for business trip to { } in the amount of $000.00 (000 miles total at $0.485 per mile.) In reference to: California Labor Code Section 2802.
- Under the contingencies of loss wages for business trip taken to { } in the amount of $00.00. In reference to: California Labor Code Section 2802.
- 14 days of waiting, at $00.00 per day, for my check after termination date on 00/00/0000 in the amount of $000.00.
2007-10-27 04:03:27 · 7 answers · asked by Haunted 3 in Business & Finance ➔ Other - Business & Finance
I demand that payment of the full amount be paid to me at the address stated below within 7 days from the date of this letter.
If this matter is not resolved by this time I may commence legal proceedings to recover the debt without further notice to you and this letter may be tendered in court as evidence of your failure to attempt settlement.
2007-10-27 04:04:36 · update #1
It's supposed to be, is it not?
2007-10-27 04:07:20 · update #2
Well isn't it supposed to sound as though it's coming from a lawyer, or at very least someone who knows what they are talking about? I researched the law!
2007-10-27 04:09:22 · update #3
Err, "in correlation to...."
2007-10-27 04:15:49 · update #4
It looks pretty good. You can use contingencies or you can substitute "Due to circumstances of"--contingencies usually means no one meant for it to happen, but it did. On your added details, you wimped out with the "may". It implies that you aren't really serious, go with "will". It wouldn't hurt to cc to a lawyer. I'm not saying you actually have to send the carbon copy to the lawyer, but make them think you did.
Additional: Instead of using "is correlative" just use "relates". Also anywhere you have "demand" just "ask".
2007-10-27 04:14:44 · answer #1 · answered by sursumcorda 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
You're not going to get anywhere with that letter. You should always start out being polite and explain why you feel that you are owed the money. Whenever someone makes demands or threatens legal action, the reader is offended and ignores it. Appeal to the reader's sense of fairness and that person will want to help you. If you do end up in court, the judge will not think much of your letter as you started out hostile.
Drop the demands and legal codes and explain your situation in plain English. If you do not get a satisfactory reply, then consult a lawyer or the department of labor relations. You always want to appear reasonable if you expect others to help.
2007-10-27 04:23:41 · answer #2 · answered by Harbinger 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Have you done your homework or what!
I would simplify your letter.
Dear So & So:
Iam writing conerning the amount of $? whish is owed to me. According to California statutes (Put them in here.) I am entitled to payment at this time. Should I not receive payment by ___________, I shall undertake litigation.
Then do it.
Keep your letter short and simple. If the company you are writing to has a legal department, they will look up the statutes and know you have done your homework.
Good luck
2007-10-27 04:16:15 · answer #3 · answered by jack of all trades 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
Suggest
If settlement is not made within 7 working days legal proceedings will be issued for the full amount together with any interest acrued.
* I'm in the UK, and assume that you can charge interest in California.
2007-10-27 04:16:39 · answer #4 · answered by Luke Warnes 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
The punctiation ought to bypass out side, as a results of fact it incredibly is only an element of the word which you're seperating with the coma. The exception could be if it have been on the top of the sentence, it is going interior. wish that helps
2017-01-04 12:47:49 · answer #5 · answered by ? 4 · 0⤊ 0⤋
you could rephrase a little yeah... "correlative"? why? lol
2007-10-27 04:07:08 · answer #6 · answered by hedgepiglet 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
its too technical but go for it.
2007-10-27 04:06:10 · answer #7 · answered by Jene 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋