A Poem For SoCaL
The sky is furious.
A canvas slashed with billows of color.
Blacks and purples
reds and blues - so curious.
Underneath, the mortals weep.
Children scramble from their beds.
Bodies Tremble. Souls cry out.
People bow their heads.
Embers dance and flit
from tree to tree again.
Another majestic giant falls,
succumbing to the strangest din.
Animals in fear take flight.
Hopes and dreams are charred.
As the futile curtain of water falls,
the beauty of nature is marred.
Girders and beams, bricks and stone
huddle in piles of smoking trash.
Memories gone up in smoke,
everything becoming ash.
Morning will come.
Homes will rise from soot and flame.
Buds of green will appear in Spring
But nothing will ever be the same.
2007-10-27 01:13:47 · 9 answers · asked by o7mistique 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Thank you for your answers. I'm not very confident when it comes to writing and I NEVER show anyone what I write. But, this time I decided to and you all made me feel good. I wish I could give you ALL 10 points :o)
2007-10-27 14:43:02 · update #1
You have a gift! Use it!
2007-10-27 03:25:56 · answer #1 · answered by Lover of Blue 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I think your poem is beautiful. It captures the rage of the fires and touches on not only the people affected, but also the animals (which I saw a news story on this morning, actually). I love how you sum it up in the end that the area will rebuild, but they will never forget. Beautiful.
2007-10-27 09:03:12 · answer #2 · answered by Nikki765 3 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Sounds like the calm after the storm. If someone has ever been through the wrath of nature, they can definitely relate to this poem. wonderful :)
2007-10-27 19:54:26 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
It's amazing !
I'm wondering how can human soul feel such ways and still we DO NOTHING many times, but hurt each other.
Thank you for shearing.
Hug
2007-10-27 08:37:21 · answer #4 · answered by :)(: 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Good Job.
2007-10-27 09:35:22 · answer #5 · answered by ? 5 · 0⤊ 0⤋
Of course it's not dumb!!! It's beautifull! Great Job! Bravo!!!!! :D
2007-10-27 08:20:28 · answer #6 · answered by *luna's lover* 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
no this poem is not dumb
it is an emotion filled poem, that i can tell
i like it
2007-10-27 10:25:42 · answer #7 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Is there something bothering u?
2007-10-27 09:48:17 · answer #8 · answered by master J 2 · 0⤊ 0⤋
love it. you should keep writing more =).??!
2007-10-27 08:26:55 · answer #9 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋