You’ve already said what you’ve wanted to say in the first verse? You’ve just started the poem and already written yourself into a hole? What do you do next?
(Here is my ‘hole’ that I’ve written myself into.)
These hallowed walls that once housed
childhood wonder and innocence
are now inhibited by
a wiser, but much sadder, soul.
(Perhaps this should be the last verse? Any suggestions?)
2007-10-25 18:14:11 · 4 answers · asked by Doc Watson 7 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Neo, thank you. A person can be sadder but still not sad. I've just been thinking lately how quickly young people today are losing their innocence and are 'growing up' way too quickly to fully enjoy childhood. The problem is converting these thoughts to verse isn't always so easy.
2007-10-25 19:24:11 · update #1
Leland, I like that phrase: 'Interior decorating.'
2007-10-27 19:16:15 · update #2
Many of the old poets wrote one stanza poems. If the poem is complete it is complete, to add more would just be redundant, besides the nature of poetry is what is left unsaid & therefore left for the reader to discover in their own soul. I see it says it all, but don't be sad my friend, what you see now is not the end.
(((HUG)))
2007-10-25 19:14:45 · answer #1 · answered by ? 5 · 3⤊ 1⤋
Yes! Not only the first verse, but often the first line is so good, that anything after, just goes downhill !!!
Leave your poem as is. It is complete.
2007-10-25 21:33:11 · answer #2 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 2⤊ 1⤋
"Now inhabited..." could make up your closing thoughts after more reminising upon the innocent past and pleasures. (The now, perhaps done via the reflection upon recent "interior decorating" -pun suggestive?).
2007-10-27 19:03:25 · answer #3 · answered by LELAND 4 · 2⤊ 0⤋
Yes...just leave it as a short poem.
2007-10-25 18:30:03 · answer #4 · answered by FutureRising 5 · 1⤊ 2⤋