how do you see this?

Question

O pious of the heart, I am lost in a love, so great
O pain the hidden secrets will become open debate.
Shipwrecked we just float, O favorable wind arise,
May we one more time gaze upon that familiar trait.
Passage of time and the stars, are but what we fantasize
For compassion and kindness, it is never too late.
In the circle of wine and roses, nightingale’s song is prize
With the aroma and the wine your senses satiate.
O Thou compassionate one, life giver and the wise
One day bestow thy grace upon this mendicant’s state.
For peace of this world and the next, understand what I advise
Magnanimity the lot of friends, and with foes try to relate.

In the land of repute, our passage they will dispute
If this will not suit, don’t stay mute, and transmute dictates of fate.

When destitute and in need, let your love and passion breed
Life’s alchemy, essence and seed, unimagined wealth shall create.

If unruly with pride, with a candle’s zeal your flame will rise
Beloved turns stone to lava, and molten wax manipulate.
The Grail contains but wine, if only you realize
Then the Kingdom of the world, at your feet prostrate.
The good and wise Magi, forgivers of lives and lies
Bearer bring good news, drunkards’ wine consecrate.
With this wine stained robe, Hafiz would never disguise
O untainted pure Master, exempt us from this fate.

Answer 1

They're is some wisdom in there BUT YOU'VE HIDDEN IT BEHIND A ROMANTIC USE OF WORDS!!!! Boy does that anger me, glad you have such a great ability to paint with words, but poets F UP the message when they make it oooo sooooo abstractly descriptive. They did this to the bible, now we have over 1000 different denominations because people can't see eye to eye on all those cute little romantic descriptions of who, what and how to pratice. So please for the love of god keep your poetry between you and your sweetheart, your hurting the rest of the poetically challenged public as they try to figure what you put and just ramble thru the writings, think to themselves, "how romantic" and think that's all it takes to make a great relationship, your hurting my fine work. I LOVED YOUR DESCRIPTION of being honest, but no ones going to get that to the point of how terribly important it is, especially with all those other colorful descriptions..... romantic poetry to me is a contradiction because it hampers communications....... cute gift, but a horrible way to teach what love is really about.... also it becomes boarder-line prideful because you assume the rest of us know your speech and what your talking about, if you were really compassinate about teaching people, you'd speck in a way thats easy for ANYONE to understand. Here since your point wasn't to do that, you were being pridful, showing off all your great skill and love, well congrulations your a human that can type poetry, the frist one in history, o wait...... but in closing, it is a great poem, can't deny that, just the purpose of it, gets me.....