please take a look at this thank you job interview letter and offer suggestions.?

Question

I want to thank you very much for taking the time to discuss an internship opportunity at (company) l with me. I enjoyed
meeting you and learning more about the company and the
position expectations.

The interview has greatly increased my enthusiasm for the position and interest in joining the (company) team. I believe my education, experiences, and personality will fit nicely with the job requirements, and I am certain I could make a significant contribution to the company over time.

I would like to reiterate my strong interest in the position and in working with you and (Company). Please feel free to call me at the telephone number or email address listed above if I can provide you with any additional information. I will email both you and (person2) after I have received and reviewed the DVD.

Again, thank you for the interview and for your consideration.

Sincerely,

Answer 1

I would be careful with the use of "and." You can only have one AND in one sentence, or otherwise, you have to use comma to separate them.

Also, you are interviewing for an internship, not a full position. Some phrases you used are not appropriate. Be careful NOT to put yourself in equal footing with the interviewer and the full time employees.

Also, you don't need to reiterate your interest twice in such a short letter. It's redundunt and actually weakens your statement.

I would also reword the first sentence to read:
Thank you very much for taking the time to interview me for an internship opportunity at (company).

I suggest this change because "I want to" and "with me" are redundunt, you didn't discuss with him, he interviewed you.

It's not "please feel free to call me." It should be "please call me."

I wouldn't say "working with you" either. I'd say "learning from you and your staff," since you will be an intern, not a full employee.

Answer 2

Overall, I would say it is sufficient for what you are hoping to accomplish by writing and sending it. I would have to agree with the one person who answered about changing your wording to reflect the fact that you are applying for an internship and not a permanent position with this company. Also, personality usually does not have much to do with the actual job requirements so you might want to remove it from the second paragraph. Making a significant contribution to the company over time may not be the most appropriate comment to make since internships are usually for a specific length of time and therefore hardly allow one the length of time needed to make significant contributions like a permanent employee would hope to make. Please do not take this feedback as negative; it is simply the hope of the people answering your question that you do the very best that you can to make the appropriate statement to this company in the hope of them choosing you for the internship. Best wishes to you in being selected for this opportunity.

Answer 3

How long has she been teaching? Was she riffed (Reduction in Force, or a fancy way to say laid off)? Most of the teaching positions being filled now are taken by teachers with some degree of experience. This process, however, actually takes a while. The new hire must be approved by the board, which usually meets once a month during the summer. No logical teacher would give his/her notice to a previous job without board approval and a signed contract in the new district. Fortunately for your daughter, this means there is another flood of job openings in August to replace those teachers who have moved on to other districts. Of course, these openings are often in "less desirable" districts, which is why the other teachers left in the first place.

Answer 4

It's basically great, seriously, but wayyyyy too long. Nobody has time to read this. Be thankful, be nice, be interested, but get to the point!

Answer 5

I think it's perfect. Good luck