I wrote this for my step mom for her birthday:
I love life I'm soaring
Ever since I met you with a sore throat and you fed me store beans
I moved to California when I was fourteen
One night you lost it
Came busting in the closet
One leg in twisted at the hip
A whip in your right hand
A spray bottle in your left
You said " sexy step-mom!"
Sprayed it and made the sound effect
When we went shopping there was no stopping us
We got to talking and started swapping trust
From writing backseat poems with crayons
To late night seance
I miss you, lets hang out more
What do you say Mom?
I know you love me
I love you back with all of me too
When I find a girl I hope she has the same qualities as you
Your so sweet and compassionate
You gave me the best advice in life anytime I asked for it
Thank you for all that you do
Most importantly
Thank you for just being you!
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by the way I used to live in the closet when i first moved to Cali cuz my dad and stepmom had a one bedroom apartment and the...
2007-10-17 14:05:27 · 2 answers · asked by Keith 2 in Family & Relationships ➔ Family
closet was big enough to fit a small bed in there and hang some clothes, so it was temp. situation until we found another place. And the whip/sexystepmom/backseatpoems/seance are all inside jokes we have. I'm just asking are the rhymes good, u know?
2007-10-17 14:06:40 · update #1
Don't change a thing buddy.
She'll have a joyfull tear in her eyes before she's done reading it, I'm sure of that.
Something from the heart like that has all of the rhyme it needs.
2007-10-17 14:41:30 · answer #1 · answered by No More 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I always think poetry is better when it doesn't rhyme, it sounds too contrived with all that rhyming. I like this, its sweet.
2007-10-17 21:09:02 · answer #2 · answered by tjnstlouismo 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋