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Enclosed is the check for the amount of the bail. Although I do not agree with the statement that I failed to stop on a red light. When I entered the intersection going on Valencia Blvd. and making a left turn onto McBean the light was yellow at the time, turning red, a second before I finished the turn. My failure
was not stopping on yellow.

The yellow light it only remains yellow for three seconds and that particular intersection is very wide. A left turn requires to go across seven lanes. When others with fewer lanes have the same amount of time or a second more. Just to mention some; Soledad Blvd. and Camp Plenty have two lanes on each side, Soledad and Whites Cyn. have five lanes, and Soledad and Sierra Hwy also have five lanes.

Perhaps a time adjustment is necessary on traffic lights on intersections that have a large number of lanes. This will balance it out and also makes it fair and safer for all drivers

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Enclosed is the check for the amount of the fine. I plead no contest since I do not agree with the statement that I failed to stop on a red light. When I entered the intersection going on Valencia Blvd. and making a left turn onto McBean, the light was yellow at the time, turning red a second before I finished the turn. My failure was not stopping on yellow.

The light only remains yellow for three seconds and that particular intersection is very wide. A left turn requires one to go across seven lanes while other intersections with fewer lanes have the same amount of time or a second more. As examples, Soledad Blvd. and Camp Plenty have two lanes on each side, Soledad and Whites Cyn. have five lanes, and Soledad and Sierra Hwy also have five lanes.

Perhaps a time adjustment is needed on traffic lights on intersections that have a large number of lanes. This will balance it out and also makes it fair and safer for all drivers.