I am writing a thank you letter for an interview i just had, i need to know if this sounds professional.?

Question

I would like to thank you for taking the time to meet with me for the internship position.

As our interview progressed, I grew confident that I will be able to expand my knowledge within the firm. The fast paced, multi-tasking environment is perfect for my capabilities.

As I mentioned during the interview, I have strong multi-tasking and determination needed to accomplish tasks that are to be fulfilled. I feel that as an intern I will develop great knowledge from experiences within your company.

Mr. , I thank you again for considering me for the internship position. I look forward to hearing from you within the next couple of weeks. I also look forward to possibly sharing my experiences with you.

Sincerely,

Answer 1

On the whole it is good.

However, I think that the way you start off each paragraph weakens it. I suggest making the following changes:

Change "I would like to thank you for . . ." to "Thank you for . . . ." Thank him -- don't tell him that you would like to.

Change "As our interview progressed, I grew confident: to "I am confident" or even "I am excited about the possibility to expand . . . ."

In the third paragraph, drop the "As I mentioned in the interview,"

In the last paragraph -- get rid of the word "Possibly" If you have to use it, change it to "look forward to the possibility of sharing . . . ." As it is, you are splitting an infinitive.

Good luck.