victim of life
Behold the sight of my very own Golgotha,
The gallows enlightenend by a Full Hunters Moon.
Too proud of his art, the smug little carpenter,
his newest creation, Just a tool for my doom,
Sunrise I greet you, your warmth and your light,
So warm and so tender, you were never the night.
In tears I see you, The very last time to be.
But I sure have enjoyed most of my wonderful life,
A sinner , a fool , or just a common beggar,
Or just a victim, a victime of life.
It is no fun, to burn in hells fire,
But I sure have enjoyed my wonderful life.
Please stay here with me, stay by my side
It is just I, your precious child.
Cover my bed with all of your tears,
And I will save you from all of your fears.
2007-10-11 08:20:41 · 7 answers · asked by The Dark Prince 3 in Arts & Humanities ➔ Poetry
Guitar God. Right on the money. I belive in God but have problems with the messengers. Having being raped and abused by a priest has that efeect on you. Thanks for reading closely.
2007-10-11 08:29:46 · update #1
I love the last two lines. They sum it all up perfectly I think
2007-10-11 08:32:21 · update #2
Some nice word choices here.
(psst...shouldn't you getting married...you may need to get off the computer...lol)
2007-10-11 11:03:28 · answer #1 · answered by Todd 7 · 1⤊ 0⤋
I feel the same about the trappings of religion, the atrocities that have been committed in "His" name leave me dumbfounded. And that is why I also refuse to give up on the Mission to Enlighten the World to the Darkness Within. I crack up when someone thinks an inverted cross, a pentagram or the #666 is "evil" only people are evil, mostly because of the seven deadly sins. I have trouble with Pride and Lust, but I fight the urges all the time (I win about 3/4 of the time.)
By the way, my pentagrams have halos!
Thanks for another wonderfully thought-provoking piece, Prince!!!
2007-10-11 17:26:12 · answer #2 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Hmmm, interesting. A quick analysis leads me to believe that you believe in God and in the peace that he provides but, you harbor bitterness toward him and choose to suffer in the darkness rather than repent of your own pride. Close? Maybe a little?
2007-10-11 15:26:54 · answer #3 · answered by Anonymous · 0⤊ 0⤋
Very well done, very well indeed. In the short time I have been doing YA, I have seen a few changes in style, as well as content, and all have been for the good.
2007-10-11 15:31:24 · answer #4 · answered by Dondi 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋
I really liked your poem a lot.You have a great way of expressing your words in it.
2007-10-11 15:26:25 · answer #5 · answered by Dee S 1 · 0⤊ 0⤋
nice poem as i know it always comes from your heart,It;s really sad 'but has lots of hope too.....
2007-10-11 16:13:58 · answer #6 · answered by Cami lives 6 · 0⤊ 0⤋
This is really really good. You've outdone yourself.
2007-10-11 19:40:58 · answer #7 · answered by Marguerite 7 · 0⤊ 0⤋