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Question- "The Civil War was the contemporary equivalent of a nuclear attack on the nation"-so writes a prominent scholar. Do you agree or disagree? Why?
~What were the constitutional issues that led to the Civil War?
~Why were Americans unable to resolve those issues peacefully?

We, here at Marion, agree with the statement made by William Banks. The Civil War resembles a nuclear attack in quite a few aspects. The obvious reason is because the Civil War killed thousands of people, just as a nuclear attack would. Another reason is because of what it did to the economy, praticularly in the South. The war destroyed the South's cropland, which was the South's main source of revenue. By the end of the Civil War, the South was experianceing a depression, while the North had an inflated economy.

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"This is not a war of geographic sections, nor political factions, but of principles and systems. It is a war for social equality, for rights, for justice, for freedom. Its outcome should not be the preservation of the old Union, but rather the creation of a new nation." so states a long-time opponent of slavery. This statement not only sums up the reasons for the Civil War, but also accuretly predicts the future of what happens to the Union.



Although slavery was one of the causes of the Civil War, the real main reason was the differing views on what the ultimate level in government should be. The South had felt that each state should be able to dictate laws, and the national government shouldn't be able to interfere. The North felt just the opposite. These disagreements were merely fueled by the issue of slavery.



To further the sectionalism of the North and South was another issue, tariffs. The North supported putting tariffs on the South, so that they would buy more

from the North and thus boost the North's economy. The South disagreed with this and felt that they were being marginalized. It frustrated the South that the North not only had a larger population, but was also trying to dictate how the people in the South should live and act.

Please give me any tips you have on the structure and if you have any ideas of what I could add in.

Oh, and thanks for spending time reading this (if anyone does). ^_^

Answer 1

It reads well, but you should pull it together. Try using a thesis statement listing what you'll say in each paragraph. Also, check your spelling in particular, or is it praticular? :o)